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Does this sentence sound good and not too long? "An agreement written under the influence of alcohol leaves Jane, a 30-something-year-old secretary, no choice but to choose whether she’ll make Jack, the handsome but serious CEO, fall in love with her or lose her bet to all her friends." Does the above sound fine? (Jane bet with her friends when she was drunk and signed a paper her friends made that she would make the CEO fall in love with her) I'm practicing writing a drama synopsis. Thank you.
Sep 6, 2019 11:36 AM
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It's All Good Man
September 6, 2019
It isnt too long, but "no choice but to choose" is a bit repetitive. Try "no alternative". Or "no option"
September 6, 2019
Looks good, but a bit long with the descriptions. I would make it into two sentences. Use the first sentence to Describe the two characters, and the second sentence to describe Jane's dilemma.
September 6, 2019
Toyger
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English, Fur
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