My older brother Hamza married Farah 8 years ago. They have now four kids, two boys and two girls. One boy aged 8 and another aged 6 months. One girl aged 6 and another 4. They live a happy life l.
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My older brother Hamza married Farah 8 years ago. They have four children, two boys, and two girls. The boys ages are 8 and 6 months. The girls are ages 6 and 4. The family lives a happy life.
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