There are quite a few simple mistakes.
Names and the start of a sentence should be capitalised.
Punctuation like commas and full stops (periods) should have exactly one space after them, and no spaces before. Please tell other people in China that this is necessary.
Grammatically, most of it is OK, except the last sentence. 'like' and 'visit' are present tense, 'was' is past.
'be visited' doesn't make sense on it's own. Perhaps 'and I also like to be visited'.