happyrose
Could you please help me correct the letter? Dear Jack, Long time no see. How are you going these days? I know that you are taller and taller now. I have also changed a lot. First of all, in the past it was difficult for me to learn English. And I couldn’t understand what my teacher said in class.But now, I find some good ways to lean English. For example, I take notes by writing down some key word. What's more, I used to get up late , but now l get earlier than l used to save more time to learn something. And I become more mature and now I know everything my parents do is for me. We have more conversations than before. Last but not least, I used to be so lazy that I seldom went out. But I realized the importance of doing sports. So I'm used to taking a walk after dinner. I have changed a lot because I want to do something great for our country. So I need to improve myself to face the challenges confidently.
Nov 4, 2021 4:47 AM
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Dear Jack, Long time no see. How are you these days? I know that you have grown taller since the last time we met and just to let you know I have also changed a lot. In the beginning, it was difficult for me to learn English. I couldn’t understand what my teachers taught in class. However, I have identified some good ways to learn English now. For example, I will take down notes by writing the new words in a book. Also, I used to get up late in the morning but now l would wake up earlier just to learn more. I have became more mature and aware that what my parents did for me since young are all for me. We started to have more conversations than before. Lastly, I used to be so lazy and seldom do any form of sports. But I realized the importance of doing sports and will set some time to take walks after dinner. I have changed a lot because I want to do something great for our country. So I will need to improve upon myself to face the challenges confidently.
Nov 5, 2021 10:28 AM
Dear Jack, Long time no see. How are you going these days? I know that you are taller and taller now. I have also changed a lot. First of all, in the past it was difficult for me to learn English. And I couldn’t understand what my teacher said in class. But now, I find some good ways to lean English. For example, I take notes by writing down some key word. What's more, I used to get up late, but now l get earlier than l used to save more time to learn something. And I become more mature and now I know everything my parents do is for me. We have more conversations than before. Last but not least, I used to be so lazy that I seldom went out. But I realized the importance of doing sports. So I'm used to taking a walk after dinner. I have changed a lot because I want to do something great for our country. So I need to improve myself to face the challenges confidently. 1: (and taller) It is not needed because you have said it once. You may leave it if you want to stress it. 2: (First of all) You can more naturally start with “In the past,” and leave out “First of all.” 3: (English. And) This is a compound sentence. Basically, a comma goes here instead of a period because you used a conjunction word (“and, but, or” are the most common ones). It would look like this: “English, and”. 4: (class. But) Same as 3. 5: (find) This should be past tense. You might say “found” or “have found.” Both are correct here. 6: (word.) Remember to add an “s” when talking about multiple things. This should be “words.” 7: (get earlier) You are missing a word. It should be “get up earlier.” 8: (And) I suggest removing this word. It is okay if you want it, but you must change it like in 3. 9: (I become) You need to change the verb tense again. It is difficult, I know, but you are doing well. It should be: “I have become.” 10: (mature and) This is a sentence like 3, but you forgot the comma. It should look like this: “mature, and”. 11: (out.But) Same as 3.
Nov 4, 2021 5:15 AM
If you did all the corrections I suggested, it would look like this: Dear Jack, Long time no see. How are you going these days? I know that you are taller now. I have also changed a lot. In the past it was difficult for me to learn English, and I couldn’t understand what my teacher said in class, and now, I have found some good ways to lean English. For example, I take notes by writing down some key word. What's more, I used to get up late, but now l get up earlier than l used to save more time to learn something. I have become more mature, and now I know everything my parents do is for me. We have more conversations than before. Last but not least, I used to be so lazy that I seldom went out, but I realized the importance of doing sports. So I'm used to taking a walk after dinner. I have changed a lot because I want to do something great for our country. So I need to improve myself to face the challenges confidently. You have done and amazing job. While it looks like a lot of correction, but really, 3, 4, 10, and 11 are all the same correction. If you want to practice more writing, I have lessons that focus on reading and writing practice. We can work together to help you continue to improve.
Nov 4, 2021 5:17 AM
happyrose
Language Skills
Chinese (Mandarin), English
Learning Language
English