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Hi guys, I wrote this paragraph. I want to know if there are any errors in what I wrote and also are the commas in the right places? (We have to help the elderly by showing them the opposite of what they think by treating them well, getting close to them, and doing the things they love. Dedicate time every day to sit with them, listen to them, find out what is bothering them and try to find solutions for them that help them get rid of what is bothering them, as well as take their advice in some life matters, which makes them feel important. And that their place is still reserved between family members and society in general, thanking them for what they do, and taking them to social events, all this can comfort them). Thanks, anyone will help me
Oct 22, 2021 8:54 PM
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In general, it's very well written. This sentence might be better broken up because it's rather long: "Dedicate time every day to sit with them, listen to them, find out what is bothering them and try to find solutions for them that help them get rid of what is bothering them, as well as take their advice in some life matters, which makes them feel important. " The verb tense in that sentence should be: "Dedicate time ... to sitting, listening, finding out, etc. "...and try to find solutions for them that help them get rid of what is bothering them" should be (if continuing the same sentence) "...and trying to find solutions that help them get rid of the things that bother them." "And that their place is still reserved between family members and society in general, thanking them for what they do, and taking them to social events, all this can comfort them)." This is an incomplete sentence because there is no main subject/verb. You could start it with something like, "We should let them know that there is still a place reserved for them among family members..."
October 22, 2021
Your second try is very good! Doesn't it feel better doing it yourself? (haha) Anyway, that's how we learn, getting better little by little. The first sentence is perfect, so I'll start with the second: (My corrections are in capital letters [LIKE THIS]). We should dedicate time everyday sitting with them, listening to them and also findING out what is causing them problems to help them feel better, as well as takING their advice in some life matters, which CAN make them feel important. They should know that there is a place that is still reserved FOR THEM WITHIN THEIR families and society in general, thanking them for what they do, and taking them to social events. ALL this can comfort them. (I prefer "within their families and society in general" to "between family members and society in general" in the above sentence because "between" feels like the place for them is in the middle place with members of their family on one side and society on the other. "Within" feels like the place for them is as a part of their families and also society, what you want to say. Also, in my first suggestion I said "among", but I think "within" is better.)
October 22, 2021
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