Meng Sui
Hi Everyone, This is my first time writing something like a diary in Italki. Hope someone native speaker can correct my writing, and if anyone wanna learn Chinese, I’d like to help you improve your spoken Chinese. Back to the topic, in the morning I went to play the soccer with my friends after breakfast, and then we had a lunch together. We have eaten a lot of foods because we were all starving after playing soccer. BTW, the restaurant had crave-able bar snacks for free, and we ate all their snacks up🤣; However, we didn’t have enough money for paying tips, which made the waiter very unhappy. After lunch, my friends planned to go to movies, but I wanted to go back home to study English. So now I am learning English. Recently, I aim to improve my English, particularly spoken English. I hope I can complete my objectives in Italki.
Feb 27, 2021 6:50 PM
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Hi Everyone, This is my first time writing something like a diary on Italki. Hopefully a native speaker can correct my writing, and if anyone wants to learn Chinese, I’d like to help you improve your spoken Chinese. Back to the topic (Back on topic), in the morning I went to play soccer with my friends after breakfast, and then we had lunch together. We ate a lot (of food) because we were all starving after playing soccer. BTW, the restaurant had free crave-able bar snacks, and we ate all of them 🤣. However, we didn’t have enough money to pay tips, which made the waiter very unhappy. After lunch, my friends planned to go to the movies, but I wanted to go back home to study English. So now I am learning English. Recently, I have been aiming to improve my English, particularly my spoken English. I hope I can complete my objectives on/using Italki.
Great :) I would suggest rewording the penultimate two sentences to avoid saying "English" four times in close succession. You could say "After lunch my friends planned to go to the movies, but I wanted to go back home to study English, which is what I'm doing now. Recently I've been aiming to improve my English, particularly spoken."
February 27, 2021
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