Rina
Can you correct my text ? Q. Some people believe that automobiles have been a beneficial invention, whereas others believe any benefits are outweighed by the negative impact they have had on the environment. Which position do you support and why? Give concrete examples to support your answer. Although it may be true that automobiles have gave some negative effects on the environment, their benefits are especially valuable. There are two reasons: promoting the interaction of each local cultures and providing some human relationships. Car traffic promoted some culture interaction. First, local culture , which is that had never known and weren't introduced for people living other areas, car traffic made it easily to sharing culture with many people. Secondly, experiencing the culture, for example Yosakoi-festival in Kochi prefecture. It's traditional local dance festival in summer at Kochi prefecture. But, many people from other prefecture or from abroad are join and enjoying it every summer thanks to car traffic. It's the emblem of that car traffic is the exportation of people and culture. Lastly, it promoted emotions which born between human to human, for example friendships, sadness of farewell, and long distance relationships. It maybe unique emotion it only humans can feel. It also said long distance make more deepen human relationships. For all of these reasons, I think that the automobiles have been a beneficial invention for human. Thank you reading all of my text! ↑Also when we make things newly, personally I want to design more enviromental kind items.🚗🌏
Sep 26, 2021 2:14 PM
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Can you correct my text ? Q. Some people believe that automobiles have been a beneficial invention, whereas others believe any benefits are outweighed by the negative impact they have had on the environment. Which position do you support and why? Give concrete examples to support your answer. Although it may be true that automobiles have given some negative effects on the environment, their benefits are especially valuable. There are two reasons: promoting the interaction between local cultures and providing human relationships. Car traffic promotes some culture interaction. Firstly, local culture was never known and wasn't introduced to people living in other areas. Car traffic made it easy to share culture with many people. Secondly, experiencing the culture. For example, the Yosakoi festival in Kochi prefecture. It's a traditional local dance festival in summer held at the Kochi prefecture. Many people from other prefectures or from abroad are joining and enjoying it every summer thanks to car traffic. It's the emblem of that car traffic is the exportation of people and culture. Lastly, it promotes emotions which are born between human to human. For example friendships, sadness of farewell, and long distance relationships. It may be a unique emotion that only humans can feel. It also said long distance makes a more deepened human relationships. For all of these reasons, I think that the automobiles have been a beneficial invention for human. Thank you reading all of my text! ↑Also when we make new things, personally, I want to design more environmental items.🚗🌏
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Sep 26, 2021 2:31 PM
Can you correct my text ? Q. Some people believe that automobiles have been a beneficial invention, whereas others believe any benefits are outweighed by the negative impact they have had on the environment. Which position do you support and why? Give concrete examples to support your answer. Although it may be true that automobiles have had some negative effects on the environment, their benefits are very valuable. There are two reasons: they promote the interaction of local cultures and help to create relationships between people. Using cars promotes cultural interaction. At first, culture was localised, in that people never knew, and were never introduced to, people living in other areas. Car travel made it easy to share culture with many other people. Secondly, allowing people to experience the culture, for example Yosakoi-festival in Kochi prefecture. It's a traditional local dance festival in summer at Kochi prefecture. But, many people from other prefectures or from abroad join in and enjoy it every summer thanks to car travel. The emblem of car travel is the exportation of people and culture. Lastly, it promotes emotional interactions between humans, for example friendships, the sadness of farewells, and long distance relationships. It maybe unique emotions that only humans can feel. It is also said that long distances deepen human relationships. For these reasons, I think that automobiles have been a beneficial invention for human. Thank you reading all of my text! ↑Also when we make new things, personally I want to design more enviromentally friendly items.🚗🌏
Sep 26, 2021 2:24 PM
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Rina
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English, Japanese
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English