Kseniia
Digital technologies have changed different aspects of our lives, and it has been noticed, that children and adolescents have lost their love for reading, preferring to spend free time on watching TV or gaming. Teachers, parents, psychologists concern about this trend and they are trying to draw kids' attention to literature. One of the reason why children lost their interest in books might be a lack of time to read among adults. Modern life have become more stressful and challenging, that leads to altering family's traditions and habits. For example, 20-30 years ago many families could dedicate whole evenings to reading and discussing novels or articles, involving each member to this process. It helped to form love to reading and create a skill do debate ideas. Hence, parents should be a role model for their offspring and try to find an opportunity to debate books and authors with children. Secondly, children, who was born in the digital world, are wasting a lot of time using smartphone or laptops. Complexity of this situation is excessive amount of information, and young people simply may have no idea about opportunities provided by the Internet. But some lecturers include listening to audio-books or lectures in tuition courses, sharing their knowledge of e-libraries with their students. So, pointing to the right way among the myriad online-sources could encourage young generation to read more without necessity to abandon modern technologies. In a nutshell, adults play a significant role in parenting and instilling a right positive habits such as reading. Undoubtedly, modern lifestyle demands adult's permanent concentrate and focusing on smartphones and with their e-mail apps, e-calendars and an absolutely huge entertainment space. However, people should adapt to changes and help children to learn applying gadgets for personal development.
Feb 28, 2021 9:04 AM
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Mar 1, 2021 12:16 PM
Digital technologies have changed different aspects of our lives, and it has been noticed, that children and adolescents have lost their love for reading, preferring to spend free time on watching TV or gaming. Teachers, parents and psychologists are concerned about this trend and they are trying to draw kids' attention to literature. One of the reason why children have lost their interest in books might be a lack of time to read among adults. (I think this is getting off the topic) Modern life has become more stressful and challenging, this had led to an alteration of families' traditions and habits. For example, 20-30 years ago many families would dedicate whole evenings to reading and discussing novels or articles, involving each member in this process.(is this true?!) It helped to form a love for reading and create a skill in debating ideas. Hence, parents should be a role model for their offspring and try to find an opportunity to debate books and authors with children. Secondly, children born in the digital world, are wasting a lot of time using smartphones or laptops. The result of this situation is an excessive amount of information, and young people simply may have no idea about reading opportunities provided by the Internet. However, some lecturers include listening to audio-books or lectures in tuition courses, sharing their knowledge of e-libraries with their students. So, pointing to the right way among the myriad of online-resources could encourage the young generation to read more without the necessity to abandon modern technology. In conclusion, adults play a significant role in parenting (of course!) and instilling positive habits such as reading. Undoubtedly, the modern lifestyle demands adult's permanent concentration, focusing on smartphones and their e-mail apps, e-calendars and a huge entertainment space. However, people should adapt to changes and help children to learn to apply gadgets for personal development.
There is some good stuff here, your introduction is fine. However, I think it goes too far away from the topic of reading. If I only read the conclusion I would think this essay is about people using modern technology too much. Body para 1 - explain why it is difficult to get children to read. Modern technology Lack of support by parents Body para 2 - suggest what can be done to encourage children to read. Get parents to encourage their children. Teachers should tell children about online resources. If you do this, it will help with your task achievement and coherence & cohesion.
Feb 28, 2021 10:16 AM
Digital technologies have changed different aspects of our lives, and it has been noticed, that children and adolescents have lost their love for reading, preferring to spend free time on watching TV or gaming. Teachers, parents, psychologists concern about this trend and they are trying to draw kids' attention to literature. One of the reason why children lost their interest in books might be a lack of time to read among adults. Modern life have become more stressful and challenging, that leads to altering family's traditions and habits. For example, 20-30 years ago many families could dedicate whole evenings to reading and discussing novels or articles, involving each member to this process. It helped to form love to reading and create a skill do debate ideas. Hence, parents should be a role model for their offspring and try to find an opportunity to debate books and authors with children. Secondly, children, who was born in the digital world, are wasting a lot of time using smartphone or laptops. Complexity of this situation is excessive amount of information, and young people simply may have no idea about opportunities provided by the Internet. But some lecturers include listening to audio-books or lectures in tuition courses, sharing their knowledge of e-libraries with their students. So, pointing to the right way among the myriad online-sources could encourage young generation to read more without necessity to abandon modern technologies. In a nutshell, adults play a significant role in parenting and instilling a right positive habits such as reading. Undoubtedly, modern lifestyle demands adult's permanent concentrate and focusing on smartphones and with their e-mail apps, e-calendars and an absolutely huge entertainment space. However, people should adapt to changes and help children to learn applying gadgets for personal development.
Well done Kseniia. You used good vocabulary and kept the same register throughout the essay. The only suggestion I have to improve your writing task is to use a more formal final for the last paragraph. "In a nutshell" is too informal for an IELTS essay. I would suggest to use more formal connectors like "To conclude", "In conclusion", "To sum up", "In final analysis", "Hence", etc.
Feb 28, 2021 9:31 AM
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Kseniia
Language Skills
English, Russian
Learning Language
English