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Hi everyone, in this essay is it each topic sentence and it is fully supported by its supporting sentences ? All people try to find happiness in physical things to touche effects of happiness.However, they never think the most effects of happiness in Basic things such mental health, exercises, and relationships . One of the most effects of happiness, give people more energy to do exercises such as yoga.This exercise could have relationship between body and brain, so it will help people to make a balance their thoughts and what they live.Then they can face any problems in their live without affect on lifestyle . when people be happy, they will have a good mental Health.So,they can sleep deeper ,and eat a healthy food.Moreover, they will be more positive.Then they will achieve all goals that they want.as result, they will become successful in their life. people with happiness, will find a healthy relationships.Then everyone will find someone encourage them to do the best when they did some mistakes. So, they will find love , support, and safety .Due to happiness, people have more Space to share thier thouhts and feelings As soon as find happiness ,ever things in your life will change. When you do exercise , your lifestyle become healthier.Second,you will be become successful. lastly, you will find someone support you any time. These are three common effects of happiness.
Mar 1, 2021 12:09 PM
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Hi everyone, in this essay is it each topic sentence and it is fully supported by its supporting sentences ? All people try to find happiness in physical things to touche effects of happiness.However, they never think the most effects of happiness in Basic things such mental health, exercises, and relationships . One of the most effects of happiness, give people more energy to do exercises such as yoga.This exercise could have relationship between body and brain, so it will help people to make a balance their thoughts and what they live.Then they can face any problems in their live without affect on lifestyle . when people be happy, they will have a good mental Health.So,they can sleep deeper ,and eat a healthy food.Moreover, they will be more positive.Then they will achieve all goals that they want.as result, they will become successful in their life. people with happiness, will find a healthy relationships.Then everyone will find someone encourage them to do the best when they did some mistakes. So, they will find love , support, and safety .Due to happiness, people have more Space to share thier thouhts and feelings As soon as find happiness ,ever things in your life will change. When you do exercise , your lifestyle become healthier.Second,you will be become successful. lastly, you will find someone support you any time. These are three common effects of happiness.
Thinking only about the topic sentences, and support in the paragraphs, this is mostly fine. The only thing not quite right is that you say having good mental health means you can eat healthy food. Maybe eating healthy food helps with mental health. Well done!
March 1, 2021
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