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Here's an exercise of writing a review according to the task below. Please help me correct it š
Reviews wanted:
Send us a review of a book or film that focuses on somebody who has made an important contribution to society.
Did you learn anything new about the personās life from the book or film? Did the book or film help you understand why this person made their important contribution?
-------āThe theory of everything ā A review on the movie ā-------
In a world where billboards are full of commercial and superficial movies, I have stumbled across āThe theory of everythingā a wonderful drama movie based on Stephan Hawkingās true story. I will be reviewing not only the lessons I learned from it, but also Hawkingās scientific accomplishments.
The movie set in Britain is directed by James Marsh and starring Eddie Redmayne as the lead role for Stephan Hawking. Heās a brilliant student in Cosmology at the prestigious University of Cambridge. While he researches as part of his doctorate about the creation of the universe, the wonders of love surprise him as he meets a fellow student. Full of romance and sparks of comedy, it stays true to life, with a dramatic scene as heās diagnosed with a degenerative illness. The life lessons conveyed by this movie about the importance of grit through hardships are of utmost importance for anyone. What I liked the most was to get an insight into the challenges, life changes, and accomplishments that this scientific celebrity had to face. His research was also groundbreaking to the scientific and medical community, as he tackled the most ancient mystery of the universe, namely how it began. His work resulted in scienceās advancement as he confronted conceptions time, and inspired people worldwide.
I was pleasantly surprised by learning about this celebrityās life in such a real manner, and although you might drop some tears, it would appeal to anyone willing to be taken on an adventure of the wonder of the universe.
21 de ago de 2021 12:37
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Hi Satchie, corrections are in the square bracket! I've added a few notes at the bottom. This is excellent work!
-------āThe theory of everything ā A review [OF] the movie ā------- In a world where billboards are full of commercial and superficial movies, I have stumbled across āThe theory of everythingā[COMMA] a wonderful drama movie based on Steph[E]n Hawkingās true story. I will be reviewing not only the lessons I learned from it, but also Hawkingās scientific accomplishments. The movie set in Britain is directed by James Marsh and star[S] Eddie Redmayne as the lead role for Stephan Hawking. Heās a brilliant student [OF] Cosmology at the prestigious University of Cambridge. While he researches as part of his doctorate about the creation of the universe, the wonders of love surprise him as he meets a fellow student. Full of romance and sparks of comedy, (it)* stays true to life, with a dramatic scene as heās diagnosed with a degenerative illness. The life lessons conveyed by this movie about the importance of grit through hardships are of utmost importance for anyone. What I liked the most was to get an insight into the challenges, life changes, and accomplishments that this [CELEBRITY SCIENTIST] had to face. His research was also [REGARDED AS] groundbreaking [BY] the scientific and medical community, as he tackled the most ancient mystery of the universe, namely how it began. His work resulted in scienceās advancement as he [CHALLENGED THE CONCEPT OF] time, and inspired people worldwide. I was pleasantly surprised [TO LEARN] about this celebrityās life in such a real[ISTIC] manner, and although you might [SHED]** some tears, it would appeal to anyone willing to be taken on an adventure [THROUGH] the wonder[S] of the universe.
*To improve the flow of your writing, I would swap the pronoun āitā to āThe movieā
** āShedā is a word with multiple meanings. In this context it is a C1 level word and it means āto allow tears or blood to flowā
21 de agosto de 2021
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Sachie
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Inglês, Francês, Alemão, Português, Espanhol
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Inglês, Alemão, Português
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