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Before I watching this fantastic movie,I can not believe how can a person stayed in prison for 19 years but not lost his hope.As the movie said,hope is a good thing,maybe the best of things.And no good thing ever dies.There is no doubt that all of us need hope to keep going,in the whole movie,Andy never lost his hope of free which is extravagant to prisoners .He firmly believe he was innocent.The powerful heart made him keep excavating the wall,in the end,he came back to life successfully.
This movie taught me never lose my hope,maybe now we are in trouble or upset.Without doubt,everyone will meet trouble big or small,but a willing heart which full of hope will always help us get through the trouble.Some birds are not mean to be caged .Their feathers are just too bright .And when they fly away,the part of you that knows it was a sin to lock them up does rejoice.So I hope can also be a bright bird the same as Andy .This is the second time I have seen this movie ,different from the first time ,I got deeper understanding of free,hope and friendship.Maybe the thrid time I review it ,I can get more treasure.
2 de out de 2022 01:44
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This is a great review. It's not perfect English, but it's very good. It communicates great meaning to a native speaker. I'll re-write it with light edits to sound more native:
Before I watched this fantastic movie, I couldn't imagine how a person could stay in prison for 19 years without losing hope. As Andy says in the movie, "Hope is a good thing. Maybe the best of things. And no good thing ever dies." There's no doubt all of us need hope to keep going. Throughout the movie, even though he was wrongfully convicted, Andy never lost his hope of freedom. He knew he was innocent. His powerful heart compelled him to tunnel through the prison walls. In the end, he came back to life successfully.
This movie taught me to never lose hope. In life, everyone will meet with troubles big and small. But a willing heart full of hope will always help us through. Stephen King once wrote, "Some birds and not meant to be caged. Their feathers are just too bright. And when they fly away, the part of you that knows it was a sin to lock them up in the first place rejoices." So it was with Andy. And I hope I can be a bright bird, too.
This is the second time I've seen this movie and it affected me more this time. I gained a deeper understanding of freedom, hope, and friendship. If I ever watch it a third time, I hope to get even more treasure.
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Three final notes:
1. Notice my punctuation between sentences. There are spaces after each comma and period. You'll pick up just a little more respect from fluent English speakers by using punctuation how I do.
2. Notice where I used quotation marks (" ") to mark where a quote is.
3. I really liked some of the phrases you used. They're not phrases *I* would use as a native speaker but I actually like them *more* than what I would write. (e.g. "His powerful heart...")
It's a really great review you've written. Keep going! I hope your English journey is making you happy. I hope it brings you everything you want and need. I hope... 🙂️
2 de outubro de 2022
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I felt differently watching it this time than last time,I got a deeper understanding of freedom, hope and friendship. I hope the next time I watch it I will learn more out of it.
Sorry I edited like this. Happy learning
5 de outubro de 2022
Convidado
When they eventually escape you rejoice because you know that caging them was not a good thing to be done. I hope I can also be a bright bird just like Andy. It was my second time watching this movie
5 de outubro de 2022
Convidado
His powerful heart made him to keep excavating the wall, in the end he came out successfully. This movie taught me to never lose hope even when I'm in trouble or upset. It's a no doubt that everyone will come across trouble either big or small, but a willing heart that is full of hope will always help us to get through trouble. Some birds are not meant to be caged. Their furthers are too bright.
5 de outubro de 2022
Convidado
Before I watched this fantastic movie I could not believe how someone could stay in prison for 19 years but still not lose hope. As the movie said hope is the good thing maybe the best of things. Good things never die. There is no doubt that all of us need hope to keep going. In the movie Andy never lost hope towards his freedom which is extravagant to prisoners. He firmly believed in his innocence.
5 de outubro de 2022
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