A family holiday I didn't enjoy

I was born in Cádiz, like my brother, however, I only lived there for 10 years. My father is a building services Engineer and he have had has to travel so much for a lot with his job. Consequently, the my family changed the residence moved many times with him.

When I was sixteen, we were living in Alcalá de Henares (Madrid) and I was studying at secondary school. The summer family's family's summer holidays were always the same. My brother and I spent one month in Carcabuey with our grandparents while my fathers remained working in Alcalá. My parents took holidays the second summer month month of the summer and we all went together for a couple of weeks to Cádiz.

The beach in Cádiz kept still was still very unspoiled and natural. They were It was calm, unoccupied and  pleasant,... There weren't any buildings, closer to them neither restaurants or shopping centers. They were It was simply a place to relax.

(When you keep referring to "they" you are implying that there is more than one beach but in this case "the beach at Cadiz" implies that there is only one beach)

That year I convinced my parents to change the beaches. "Let's go to Torrevieja beach this time!". I had been trying to persuade them since September and finally my parents have had given in. My school friends went every summer to the same beach and they enjoyed the holidays all together. I wanted to join them. My parents asked me why I wanted to go there and I gave them a lot of reasons except for the main real one.



I knew I was wrong just when as soon as we arrived there. Torrevieja was overpopulated. There were enormeous buildings for everywhere and the people who lived there in were always around. The beach was plenty of had so many people and that it was so difficult to lie down and or even to go for a swim. We missed so much our calm and natural beach in Cádiz.

I felt so bad that I told to my family why I had told to go to Torrevieja. My parents were very angry with me and they punished me with the worst of the all possible punishments: I only could see my friends a couple of days during the holidays.

Very well done Mercedes!  Just be careful with your use of tenses, present and past.  Keep up the great work!

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A family holiday I didn't enjoy

I was born in Cádiz, like my brother. However, I only lived there for 10 years. My father is buiding services Engineer, and he have had to travel so much for job. Consequently, the my/our family changed the residence  with him had to move, too.

When I was sixteen, we were living in Alcalá de Henares (Madrid) and I was studying at secondary school. The summer family's holidays were always the same. My brother and I spent one month in Carcabuey with our grandparents while my fathers remained working in Alcalá. My parents took holidays went on vacation the second summer month and we all went together for a couple of weeks to Cádiz.

The beaches in Cádiz kept were still very natural. (I assume that you were referring to "beaches" since the rest of the paragraph talks about "they")They were calm, unoccupied, pleasant,... There weren't buildings closer to them neither restaurants or shopping center. They were simply a place to relax.

That year I convinced my parents to change the beach. "Let's go to Torrevieja beach this time!". I had been trying to persuade them since september and finally my parents have given gave in. My school friends from school went every summer to the same beach and they enjoyed the holidays all together. I wanted to join them. My parents asked me why I wanted to go there, and I gave them a lot of reasons except for the main one.



I knew I was wrong just when we arrived there. Torrevieja was overpopulated. There were enormeous buildings for everywhere and people who lived in were around. The beach was plenty of people and it was so difficult to lie down and even to go for a swim. We missed so much our calm and natural beach in Cádiz.

I felt so bad that I told to my family why I had told to go to Torrevieja. My parents were very angry with me and they punished me with the worst of the possible punishments: I only could see my friends a couple of days during the holidays.

A family holiday I didn't enjoy

I was born in Cádiz, like my brother. However, I only lived there for 10 years. My father is  A building services Engineer, and he have had to travel so much for his job. Consequently, the family changed the residence with him.

When I was sixteen, we were living in Alcalá de Henares (Madrid) and I was studying at secondary school. The  family's summer holidays (change of word order) were always the same. My brother and I spent one month in Carcabuey with our grandparents while my fathers parents (I guess that you mean your mother and father here)  remained working in Alcalá. My parents took holidays the second summer month and we all went together for a couple of weeks to Cádiz. 

The beach in Cádiz kept  were still very natural. They were calm, unoccupied, pleasant,... There weren't buildings closer to them neither restaurants or  nor shopping center. They were simply a place to relax.

That year I convinced my parents to change the beach. "Let's go to Torrevieja beach this time!". I had been trying to persuade them since September (always start days and months with a capital letter) and finally my parents have had given in. My school friends went every summer to the same beach and they enjoyed the holidays all together. I wanted to join them. My parents asked me why I wanted to go there, and I gave them a lot of reasons except for the main one.



I knew I was wrong just when we arrived there. Torrevieja was overpopulated. There were enormeous enormous buildings for everywhere and all the people who lived in them were around. The beach was plenty  full of people and it was so difficult to lie down and even to go for a swim. We missed so much our calm and natural beach in Cádiz.

I felt so bad that I told to my family why I had told them to go to Torrevieja. My parents were very angry with me and they punished me with the worst of the possible punishments: I only could see my friends a couple of days during the holidays.