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El clon im watching "el clon"now, it's the best story ever. I watch that every night, In the story, a brazilian girl ( her name is Jade ) lost her mom (she die), and she moves to Marruecos, trying to follow the customs. But she knows Lucas, a brazilian guy, who is on trip. they fell in love, but everything is difficult for her new customs. The name is "el clon" because a doctor, make a clon of Lucas, and after a lot of things and years , Jade knows him! well, i can't tell all the story because is very long, but I love it. !
5 de abr de 2013 06:18
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El clon

I'm watching "el clon" now.  It's the best story ever.  I watch it that every night. In the story, a Brazilian girl (named Jade) moved to Marruecos when her mother died. She tries to follow the customs. But She knows Lucas, a brazilian guy, who is on a trip. They fall in love, but everything is difficult because of the new customs. The name is "el clon" because a doctor made a clone of Lucas. After a lot of things happen and after many years, Jade knows him! Well, I can't tell all the whole story because is very long, but I love it!


Note: I marked some things that aren't grammatically incorrect but sound a little odd in yellow (as well as punctuation).

 

You could write one of the phrases I corrected as: "I can't tell all of the story" or "I can't tell the whole story"

 

6 de abril de 2013
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