I want have a holiday [vacation] for one week

Hello everyone, I am Vicky , from Shenzhen China . First of all , I am grateful for your time to read this text. [read my Notebook entry]

My job is a Foreign trade clerk. I love my job and I work very hard. I started this job 1 month ago. 

Because my English is not good enough, I feel like to the work too strenuous. Last month, I very started to diligently in studyied English, Now, I get a bit depressed. [I feel like all I do is] work, study English ,work , study English and nothing else, that's makes me feel almost crazy right now.

**suggestions**

[right now it's making me feel crazy] [right now it's driving [*think* moving towards a feeling**] me crazy] [Because this is all i do, I feel like I'm going crazy]

Maybe I should have (schedule?) a relaxing holiday to release [relieve] the pressure. There are many beauty beautiful places in Shenzhen.  I prefer the beach. [** no need to say since you are not specific or comparing to another, like mountains**] rather than other landscape,

Would you like have a holiday together (** with you? **) ?

[Would you like to take a holiday too?] [** this is what I think you meant to say**]

I want have a holiday for one week

Hello everyone, I am Vicky , from Shenzhen China . First of all , I am grateful for your time to read this text.
My job is Foreign trade clerk, I love my job and I work very hard , I started this job 1 month ago, Because my English is not good enough, I feel like to work too strenuous. Last month I very diligently in studied English, Now I get a bit depressed, work, study English ,work , study English nothing else, that's makes me almost crazy right now. Maybe I should have a relaxing holiday to release pressure. There are many beauty place in Shenzhen , I prefer the beach rather than other landscape,Would you like have a holiday together ?

I want have a vacation for one week

Hello everyone, I am Vicky , from Shenzhen China . First of all , I am grateful for your time to read my Notebook entry.

My job is a Foreign trade clerk. I love my job and I work very hard. I started this job 1 month ago.

Because my English is not good enough, I feel like to the work too strenuous. Last month, I very started to diligently in studyed English, Now, I get a bit depressed. I feel like all I do is work, study English ,work , study English and nothing else, that's makes me feel almost crazy right now.

[right now it's making me feel crazy] [right now it's driving [*think* moving towards a feeling**] me crazy] [Because this is all i do, I feel like I'm going crazy]

Maybe I should have schedule a relaxing holiday to release relieve the pressure. There are many beauty beautiful places in Shenzhen. I prefer the beach, rather than other landscape,

Would you like to take a holiday too?

I want to have a holiday for one week

Hello everyone, I am Vicky , from Shenzhen China . First of all , I am grateful for your time to read this text.
My job is Foreign trade clerk, I love my job and I work very hard , I started this job 1 month ago, Because my English is not good enough, I feel like to work too strenuous. Last month I very diligently in studied English, Now I get a bit depressed, work, study English ,work , study English nothing else, that's makes me almost crazy right now. Maybe I should have a relaxing holiday to release pressure. There are many beauty place in Shenzhen , I prefer the beach rather than other landscape,Would you like to have a holiday together too?

REVISED VERSION:

Hello everyone, I am Vicky , from Shenzhen China . First of all, I'm grateful that you have taken the time to
read this text. I work as a foreign trade clerk. I
got my job about a month ago. Since my job requires
me to use English on a regular basis, I sometimes
have a hard time performing my duties because my
English isn't good enough.

To solve this problem, I started studying English
diligently last month.

I feel a bit depressed because I just work and study English all day. It drives me crazy.

Maybe I should take a relaxing holiday to release
the pressure. There are many beautiful places in Shenzhen
but I prefer the beaches.

Would you like to have a holiday together?