A Package Tour or a Self-guided Tour?
The package tour and the self-guided tour are two kinds of methods to travelling [OR: travelling methods]. In the past few years, the package tour had attracted more people than the latter for some [OR: several] reasons. It [may help to restate as "The package tour"] helps us know more about places of interest in limitted limited time. **In addition, the package tour saves time for us [OR: saves us time], especially spent on researchings on hotels and vehicles.** The less concern attributes to people's support who are devoted to their work [I'm confused by this sentence: were you trying to say something like "It helps support people who are devoted to their work because it takes less time out of their day"?].
However, the self-guided tour has become more popular than the other these days. That is because civilians are getting richer, and they could can afford the price of private cars. ***Moreover, the development of Internet technology brings us convenience for looking for accomodation in cities we'll ["we will" might work better, considering you haven't used many contractions in your composition] tour.*** Now [I don't think this word is necessary], there's no doubt that many young couples or rich families will choose this kind of tour.
As a sophomore [don't think this is necessary either, but maybe you can work it into this paragraph by adding "I think" after, or something like that.], maybe [OR: perhaps] the former costs less time [OR: is less time-consuming] , but it actually cannot bring any happiness to us for to the huge population here. [Why wouldn't it bring happiness? A little unclear.] Instead, the latter remains more spare time for us gives us more spare time. I like self-guided tours though I'm easy to I easily get lost.
**This sentence is correct, but I'd personally change it to something a little more concise. Here's an example: "In addition, the package tour saves time spent on researching hotels and vehicles."
***Again, not a bad sentence, but it's a bit wordy. Possible alternate sentence: "Moreover, the development of the Internet brings convenience <em>when</em> looking for accomodation in cities we will [OR: we might] tour."
