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Ellen
A Brief Introduction To Dabu County Hello, everyone. Welcome to Dabu County in Meizhou in Guangdong, my hometown! I’m Miss Luo, your tour guide in this travel. Dabu County is famous in Guangdong province, which is called "township of the overseas Chinese, the hometown of culture, ceramics and tea". Now I introduce where we will visit today. First of all, we will go to Taian building in West Lake Park. Taian building was classed as a provincial-level cultural relic protection unit by the Guangdong people's government In August 2002. It has a history of more than 248 years. If you see it, I believe you will like it. The second attraction is Dabu Honey pomelo Park. There are a lot of honey pomelo trees. Last we will have better-tasting food. Many snacks and food are delicious in Dabu. You must like them. Please don’t litter in this travel. I hope you have a good travel.
18 de nov de 2013 13:15
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A Brief Introduction To Dabu County

Hello, everyone. Welcome to Dabu County in Meizhou in Guangdong, my hometown! I’m Miss Luo, your tour guide in this travel. Dabu County is famous in Guangdong province, which is called "township of the overseas Chinese, the hometown of culture, ceramics and tea". Now will I introduce where we will visit today. First of all, we will go to Taian building in West Lake Park. Taian building was classed as a provincial-level cultural relic 1* protection unit by the Guangdong people's government In August 2002. It has a history of more than 248 years. If you see it, I believe you will like it. The second attraction is Dabu Honey pomelo Park. There are a lot of honey pomelo trees. Last Lastly/Finally we will have better-tasting tasty food. Many snacks and food are delicious in Dabu. You must 2* will like them. Please don’t drop any litter in this travel 3* trip. I hope you have a good travel nice/lovely trip.

 

1* relic souns as if there is very little left. I would think monument is more usual if the building is still standing.

2* must sounds to me like an order. There are colloquial expressions like - you really have to try it, or I'm sure you will love it.

3* travel exists to talk about the abstract concept- travel is expensive now or I love travel. But for a specific action better use trip/ journey / visit/ holiday, etc.

 

Well corrected with appropriate vocabulary and a nice use of a friendly style. Good work.

18 de novembro de 2013
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