Chusa
My day today Today I had a good day. I won 20 euros in the lotery so I bought a big cake of strawberry and cream, it was delicious. Then, I went to the gym to get fit and lose all the calories of the cake. Now I'm a bit tired so I got to bed for sleep all night long. Good night :)
23 de out de 2014 21:40
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My day today

Today I had a good day. I won 20 euros at the lottery so I bought a big strawberry and cream (it's sounds more natural that way, in english try to put adjectives before the noun it completes) cake of strawberry and cream, it was delicious. Then, I went to the gym to get fit and lose (the right word for it would be 'burn all the calories'. The mindset is that you <em>burn calories</em> to <em>lose weight</em>!) all the calories of (or 'from the cake' but both are correct) the cake. Now I'm a bit tired so I went (or 'I'm going to bed' or 'I'll go to bed' depending on what you want to say) to bed to sleep all night long. Good night :)

 

Hope that help! I mostly put some clarifications about the right term to use to sound more natural :) Keep up the good work!

24 de outubro de 2014
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