Can someone correct this Erasmus Motivation Letter?

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am currently in the last year of my studies at the Primero de Mayo College of Dental Hygiene (Gran Canaria, Spain) and currently performing undertaking an Erasmus stay in Lahti, Finland.

I will graduate in December 2015 through the Primero de Mayo College, also gaining the title Dental Hygienist. During this time, I will already have gained experience as Dental Hygienist in a Dental Clinic here in (donde?) from September until December 2015.

I am interested in having seeking a 2 or 3 months winter internship in your company through the Erasmus Placement grant of our college. In the case of getting this grant, I will be able to supply and arrange for all my own needs (accommodation, travel, etc…) during the internship period. Accepting me as an intern will not bring any financial responsibility to your company.

Finland was the obvious choice for me. It is a country with amazing history, geography and culture. I would like acquaint myself with the local traditions and people, because I have found that people in Finland are warm, chatty and hospitable. But mainly I would like to familiarize myself with how the high level of education in country like Finland operates (o-But mainly I would like to become familiar with Finland’s well regarded higher education system. This is why I chose as a student the city of Lahti.

My strengths are: I am punctual, disciplined and a very organized person, who is not afraid of new challenges or new tasks. Also, I am responsible, precise and hard-working and have good comunication skills. For this reason I believe I would be particularly suitable for the position as Dental Hygenist.

My principal language is Spanish, I also speak fluent English and basic French. I have very good computer skills.

In addition, I believe this internship would provide me with the ideal opportunity to expand my professional skills. As an intern, I would like to contribute your company’s progress and to learn as much as I can.

My Curriculum Vitae, enclosed here for your consideration, includes additional information on my experience and skills. I hope you will accept this letter as a sincere proof of my interest and motivation in seeking an internship in your company. I am very much looking forward to meeting you and If you need any additional information, please do not hesitate in contacting me by email at [email protected].

I appreciate your time and consideration. I will be available for work from January 2016 and hope look foward to hearing from you soon. as posible because I need to take a decision as to what I shall be doing during the winter.(no creo que esta frase es necesario)

Sincerely yours,

Demelza Diepa Díaz


*(Please, correct my mistakes. Would you change something?)

Hi Demelza, I think it is very impressive although I only had a short time to read & correct it. It might be improved with a little bit of editing down.   :-))

Hola Demelza, Creo que es muy profesional aunque sólo tuve el tiempo para un vistazo rápido. Tal vez necesita editar un poquito más corto.