Hello my friend, Thanks so much for your corrections

'If someone has enough money *they* can buy anything in *their* (plural possessive) life. You can use masculine and/or feminine exclusively, but I would start the corresponding sentence: 'If a man has enough...' Not something neutral like 'If someone has enough money..." and then transitioning into gender specifics in the same sentence. I like the second paragraph, and I agree health is more valuable than wealth. Your last sentence, you open with 'Finally....' as if it was in conjunction with a structured argument or hypothesis. Or, listing off a wide number of things in different manners. Example: "First we went here, then we went there before going away. Around the block, then down the street. Finally, we arrived at home." I have a feeling you know many of the words and meanings you just have not practiced actual conversation very much-- I didn't see one incorrect spelling. Awesome work my friend!