Please, check my essay. I will be glad to see my mistakes.
Today it is totally agreed that talented people are successful in their life. Whatever they start to do, results are perfect. But some people think that the main role belongs to discipline and persistence. Nothing cannot be done without them.
I agree with this point of view. Talent is not enough in any occupation. To my mind, talent is a complex of built-in qualities and discipline. I have read "Consuelo" of George Sand. There are two artists, Consuelo and Andzoletto, in this story. They both have amazing talents, but society admired only Consuelo. She has worked with her voice, Andoletto thinks only about intrigues and paramours. This book prove me that we should work with our talents.

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Please, check my essay. I will be glad to see my mistakes.
Today it is totally agreed that talented people are successful in their life. Whatever they start to do, results are perfect. But some people think that the main role belongs to discipline and persistence. Nothing cannot be done without them. 
I agree with this point of view. Talent is not enough in any occupation. To my mind, talent is a complex of built-in qualities and discipline. I have read "Consuelo" of George Sand. There are two artists, Consuelo and Andzoletto, in this story. They both have amazing talents, but society admired only Consuelo. She has worked with her voice, Andoletto thinks only about intrigues and paramours. This book prove me that we should work with our talents.

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Hello,post this as a notebook entry.
Best wishes !

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In general, that's great English. But for corrections, it's best if you post it as a Notebook entry, because it is much easier for readers to correct writings there.

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