Just adding a few thoughts... It's understandable, but of course could be written better. If it's a formal (or even semi-formal) letter, I don't understand: - why you use "ciao" as a greeting. - why you want to abbreviate landlord to "LL" (we don't do this in English). - why you want to use "anyway" at all. What is the purpose of the second paragraph? - why capital letters are ignored. There are also some errors with word-order, and perhaps you will see them if you revise your letter again. I realise you've also posted this in Notebook, but I'm sure you can solve a few of the problems mentioned, without help.