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Integrated TOEFL Essay. Please, help me to check it. Thank you
The text and the lecture are both about group behavior which can be divide into deindividualization and polarization terms. The author of the reading believes that these two types of group behavior influence negatively on an individual and his or her perceptions while the lecturer supports the claims made in the article by supplementing it with positive outcomes of this behavior.
As a matter of fact, the author claims that in the process of deindividualization people tend to lose their self-awareness in large groups. He believes that a sense of anonymity in a group gives person a feeling of impunity, therefore, even well behaved people participate in acts of violence and ruthlessness. The lecturer bolsters this point. She agrees with the author deindividualization forces people to lose their individuality, however not only in negative way. She points out it with the illustrative examples of the effect that can have the cataclysmic event on society such as group’s kindness and the desire to help your neighbor, or exciting contest where people extremely pleased with results and express far greater joy in a group than if they would be alone.
Ultimately, the author states that harmonious persons tend to arrive at more extreme decisions than individually. He notes that polarized group of people might become fed up with tiny misconduct and decide to judge and punish that villain severely. The professor on the contrary rebuts this argument. She puts forth the example of a group of employees who suffered for years from the sardonic, egoistic boss and got together in a defense position which illustrates the prosocial group behavior.
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Please, help to correct. TOEFL Independent Essay Part 1
In Russia, nowadays, research work is in the process in various fields of the human activity. In my opinion, research in agricultural sphere in the most demand among local businessmen and farmers than any other kind of field. I think this way for two main reasons, which I will explore further on.
To begin with, Russia possesses the biggest territory in the world, including fertile farmlands with many rivers and lakes for irrigation purposes, evergreen vast forests, which are needed to be developed and maintained in a good state. It is widely known that previously agricultural segment used to have first priority in economy of the USSR, however after the downfall of the great empire in the 1990s more than half of active farmlands were in decline leaving no one in charge of the harvest, seeding functions. Therefore, only Krasnodarsky Region was able to keep the land in sustainable state and give profits to local authorities, which indicates about highly fertile quality of these lands and reasonability of state executive officers in comparison to those state managers who sold enormous territories to be used for private construction or who left farmlands without financial support. For instance, the village that I am originally from can be the proper example of this. The field that is close to my parents’ house once was in the property of state agricultural company and every summer they used different crop to be planted on the field: corn, wheat, pea and many others. Unfortunately, over the time the field became abandoned and there was name game for us, children, like hiding, picking that or another delicious plant. Therefore, many of the farmlands in our motherland are useless and gave no profit to the government.
(the second part will be posted tomorrow because I breached the limit for a day)
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Please, help to correct. TOEFL Integrated essay
The text and the lecture are about the missing colonists of Roanoke island that could move on the other islands nearby or to inland area. The author of the reading passage believes that colonist possibly went to the neighboring island of Croatan. The lecturer casts doubt on this theory presented in the article and thinks that they actually moved on the main land.
First of all, the author claims that those people moved to a different island named as Croatan. He states as proof the proximity of the island to Roanoke. However, this point is challenged by the lecturer. He says that Croatan Island was searched thoroughly in-depth and no sign or trace of the colonists was found there. Moreover, searching mission was undertaken several times with no evidence of the missing colonists.
Secondly, the author states that special carvings “Cro” and “Croatan” were left by the colonists on the trees and a fence post which allows to suggest that people moved to the neighboring island of Croatan. The lecturer rebuts this argument. He notes that on the continent there are many names can be found that somehow correlates or matches the word “Croatan”.
Finally, the professor mentions the unexpected discovery of unusual tribe on Lamber river that happened 200 years after the colonists were missed. He states that the newly found people of that tribe called themselves Croatan, spoke English and local languages, and had such fair features as blond hair and blue eyes unlike other tribes on the continent. Therefore, the lecturer puts forth the idea that this is the evidence that Roanoke missing colonists moved inland area and intermixed with local tribes.
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