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I have to rewrite the first text in a more academic style. Could someone check it, please? The following extract from an essay is written in a mixed style with colloquialisms and other inappropriate words: Another kind of useful alternative fuel is electricity. This isn’t really a very efficient fuel right now, because the technology is somewhat limited; however, it’s fair to say that recent advances in the production of electric cars could maybe make this a reality in the future. But it is possible for cars powered with electricity to release little or no emissions, so if we want this alternative fuel to become a reality, we’ll need it in lots of cars. Maybe then it’ll make some sort of a difference. If we want this to happen, i.e., to knock a big chunk out of the pollution problem all around the world, it’ll take a while. Rewrite it in a more academic style using: A useful alternative fuel is electricity although it is not a considerably efficient fuel these days, because technology is rather limited. However, it is stated that recent advances in the production of electric cars will make this a reality in the future. Even if cars powered with electricity release hardly any or no emissions, if this alternative fuel is wanted to become a reality, it will be needed in many cars. In this way, it will bring substantial changes. If this is desired, such as eliminating a portion of the pollution problem all over the world, it will be time-consuming. I don't know if some of the changes I've made are correct or would fit in a formal/academic text. Thanks for your help! :)
3 de fevereiro de 2018
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