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In twenty years, there will be fewer cars are in use than there are today. Topic: In twenty years, there will be fewer cars are in use than there are today. No one can neglect the contribution of cars in people’s life in 20th century. However, I think cars face the problem to be reduced in the next 20 years just because we overuse them today. First, in past half century, crude oil exploitation is dramatically grown which makes the energy crisis concerning all facilities which cost fuel. Car takes a considerable part of using fuel. Nowadays people are pursuing to find other substitute for gas. however, we find that it's hard to make it efficient and economic because of limited technology. Since it's a long period to develop applicable gas substitute, we think reducing cars and using bicycles and taking public transportation such as buses and trains could be a temporary replacement because there is less cost of fuel per capita when people take public transportation, comparing with individual cars. Second, fewer cars can urge a greener earth since environmental pollution is seen as a worldwide topic. Scientists predict that the sea level would rise over one meter after fifty years and a series of cities on the seashore could be immerged in one hundred years due to greenhouse effect which is caused by excessive emission of carbon dioxides. To solve this problem, we must limit the quantities of cars whose exhaust gas ranks second place in omission of greenhouse gas, right after industrial exhaust. Lastly, cars are initially used to server people's lives, but we can observe that you would hardly reach your destination on time by a car if you live in a megapolis. Traffic problem is negatively influence our lives indeed. If you read news, then you find how people deal with this issue. For example, people in London pay an extra while they are entering in the center by car. How is the situation in Beijing? The answer is your car can drive only the day of even numbers or uneven. What's more, ninety percent of people in Tokyo take subway to their offices and leave their cars at home. Thus, I assert that cars will be fewer, and public transportation will develop fast instead. To sum up, I confidently believe cars are gradually becoming fewer in twenty years than today because the problems of energy crisis, environment pollution and traffic jam.

9 Ağu 2011 04:36

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In twenty years, there will be Fewer Cars In 20 Years are in use than there are today.

Topic: In twenty years, there will be fewer cars are in use than there are today.

No one can neglect dispute the contribution enormous influence of cars in people’s our daily life in 20th century and this early part of the 21st Century. However, I think the number of cars will face the problem to be reduced in the next 20 years just because we overuse them today.

First, In the past half century, crude oil exploitation is has grown dramatically grown which makes making the energy crisis more severe and escalating costs up. 1concerning all facilities which cost fuel. Cars takes a considerable uses a considerable amount of part of using fuel. Nowadays people are pursuing because of the fuel crisis, people scramble to find other energy sources. substitute for gas. However, we find that it's hard to make it efficient and economic because of this is difficult due to limited technology of today. Since it's a long period to develop applicable gas substitute, we think reducing It will take a long time and so we need to reduce the car popluation cars and using use bicycles and taking public transportation such as buses and trains. This is only a temporary fix. could be a temporary replacement because there is less cost of fuel per capita when people take public transportation, comparing with individual cars. 2

Second, fewer cars can urge a greener earth since environmental pollution is seen as a worldwide topic. Fewer cars mean a better environment as they cause so much pollution. Scientists predict that the sea level would rise over one meter after in fifty years' time due and a Coastal cities series of cities on the seashore could be immerged will be totally submerged within in one hundred years due to greenhouse effect which is caused by excessive emission of carbon dioxides 3. To solve this problem, we must limit the quantities amount of cars whose exhaust gases ranks second place in omission of greenhouse gas, right after industrial exhaust. produced ranks second after industrial emission.

Lastly, cars are initially used to server people's lives, but we can observe that you would hardly reach your destination on time by a car if you live in a megapolis. Cars were invented to make people's life easier. Try using an automobile in a megapolis! Traffic problem is negatively influence our lives indeed. If you read news, then you find how people deal with this issue. See how it impacts our lives so negatively.For example, Different solutions are used in different places. For example, people in London one pays an extra automobile surchage when entering the business district. while they are entering in the center by car. How is the situation in In Beijing? The answer is your car can drive only the day of the solution imposed is depends on the even numbers or uneven odd numbers of the vehicle licence. What's more, ninety percent of people in Tokyo take subway to their offices and leave their cars at home. As for Tokyo, 90% of the population takes the subway. Thus, I assert that cars will become fewer, and public transportation will be developed fast instead. 4

To sum up, I confidently believe cars are gradually becoming fewer in twenty years than today because the problems of energy crisis, environment pollution and traffic jam. 5

No wonder this is no correction until you requested for my correction. This is because Your essay is too long. Its content is very mundane and generate no interest. It is a very dry and boring topic to most people. In wanting to have one's essay corrected by many people, it must be short enough, say about a paragraph of two. Something that makes your reader be interested. That's why you need to have a seductive title! Gossips rank number one. Some unusual story about your life or experience.

1. Actually I don't understand what you are trying to say. I am only guessing!

2. You are getting long winded again :)

3. This is redundant and superfluous. You don't need to explain. You have stated earlier that sea levels will be rising. This is good enough.

4. Try doing any of these solutions in Los Angeles!!!

5. You are repeating what you said in your last statement. So this is redundant and superfluous.

9 Ağustos 2011