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I am going to correct this twice. The first one in grammar mistakes, etc. The 2nd one is to show how you can write better. Compare and see the differences.
First version
My second entry, I hope you like it. =)
Well, today is a normal day for me. In the morning, I went to the University. I had got an evaluation in a matter call subject called Geometry Analytics. Then I went to the dentist and then I went to visit to my girlfriend for a little while. I came back to my home. I had lunch. I saw watched some TV news for some a few minutes (News) and now I am writing this entry in my notebook. Later I will shall go to the pool to swim for a long, while, long while. And I don't know what will happen afterwards then. That This is all for today. I'll be waiting for you reviews. Regards, italki friends!
Second version.
Well Today is a normal day for me; this is to say that in the morning, I was at the University, I had got an evaluation in a matter call and was evaluated in my Geometry Analytics class. Then I went to had an appointment with my dentist which was out of the ordinary and then I went to but visiting to my girlfriend for a little while is not! I came back to my home. I had lunch at home and watched a few minutes of I saw TV news for some a few mintinuts (News) and now I am writing this entry in my notebook. Later I will go am going to the pool to swim for a while and lounged for a long long time.while. And I don't know what will happen thenWhat happens next, I shan't know until the time comes or perhaps call it a day. That is all for today. I'll be waiting for you reviews. Regards italki friends!
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