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Poverty How many poor people in the world? I think too much. We can think that all depend on family, depend on country, depend on region, but some people forget that sometimes all depent on human. Why some poor healthy people panhandle instead of work. Often people afraid of changes, but changes do us better. I don't tell about poor people of Africa. It's so sad. But we have to help those who really need help. If you really can help such people, then you have to help. It's may be not only money, It's may be clothes, food, attention... Remember your kindness return to you. If you want to make the world better - begin with yourself.

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Poverty

How many poor people are there in the world?(1) I think too many much. We can think that it all depends on the family, depend on the country, depend on the region, but some people forget that sometimes all depent(2) on human. Why do some poor healthy people panhandle instead of working?. Often People are often afraid of changes, but changes do make us better. I don't want to talk tell about the poor people of Africa. It's so sad. But we have to help those who really need help. If you can really can help such people, then you have to help. It's may not be not only money, It's may be clothes, food, attention... Remember that your kindness will return to you.

If you want to make the world better - begin with yourself.

 

COMMENTS:

(1) Watch out! You're missing the main verb of the sentence.

(2) What do you mean here?

 

I think it is important that you try to find some synonymies while you write in English. You repeated too many times "people" and "help". You could have used: humanity, society... or "If you can really make something about it, then you have to".

 

 

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Poverty

How many poor people are there in the world?(1) I think too many much. We can think that it all depends on the family, depend on the country, depend on the region, but some people forget that sometimes all depent(2) on human. Why do some poor healthy people panhandle instead of working?. Often People are often afraid of changes, but changes do make us better. I don't want to talk tell about the poor people of Africa. It's so sad. But we have to help those who really need help. If you can really can help such people, then you have to help. It's may not be not only money, It's may be clothes, food, attention... Remember that your kindness will return to you.

If you want to make the world better - begin with yourself.

 

COMMENTS:

(1) Watch out! You're missing the main verb of the sentence.

(2) What do you mean here?

 

I think it is important that you try to find some synonymies while you write in English. You repeated too many times "people" and "help". You could have used: humanity, society... or "If you can really make something about it, then you have to".

 

 

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