Plz correct it for me! Education(Writing of IELTS)

Education(Writing of IELTS)


1.some people think that high school students should be given the freedom to evaluate and criticize their teachers, while others claim that these such/this practice will disrupt the order in classroom and lead to this disrespect for teachers.
Question:what is your opinion?

Giving freedom for/Permitting high school students to evaluate and criticize their teachers is a challenging issue in today's education; some people agree with it while others reject the idea arguing that it will be very difficult for teachers to maintain the classroom order. Personally, I support the latter view which is based on the following reasons.
Firstly, it`s very hard for high school students to adopt an objective attitude when they are required to perform an evaluation task, because they are immature and their minds are full of unrealistic expectations. Furthermore, the comments the naive students give can be very negative and unjustified/unwarranted undeserved, which (the comments is the subject; and they don't lead to a contest) The process usually/often leads to a popularity contest among teachers who are endeavoring to gain favor from students and get higher ranking instead of trying to be competent and responsible teachers.
Secondly, given the right to evaluate their teachers, the backward students tend to attribute their poor academic results to their teachers, which is very harmful for teachers` improvement. If the teachers constantly receive unwarranted criticism they will loose lose their motivation to be effectively and confident in teaching.
Finally, if the students are free to criticize their teachers, they very easily have psychological advantage and even misbehave in an intolerable way, thinking that their teachers are at their mercy. Besides, another common phenomenon that is very much likely to occur is that teachers (for fear of retaliation) are afraid of commenting on their students and correcting their mistakes because of being revenged. Consequently, teachers are bound to lose their authority and self-respects.

In conclusion, allowing the high school students to assess on their teachers as they wish is not an appropriate method in education. If permitted/encouraged In that case, the students indulge themselves in whatever they want to do, leaving no space for academic progress which is supposed to come from their teachers.

Plz correct it for me! Education(Writing of IELTS)

Education(Writing of IELTS)


1.some people think that high school students should be given the freedom to evaluate and criticize their teachers,while others claim that these practice will disrupt the order in classroom and lead to this respect for teachers.
Question:what is your opinion?

Giving freedom for high school students to evaluate and criticize their teachers is challenging issue in todays education,some people agree with it while others reject the idea arguing that it will be very difficult for teachers to maintain the classroom order.personally,I support the latter which is based on following reasons.
Firstly,it`s very hard for high school students to adopt an objection attitude when they are required to perform an evaluation task,because they are immature and their mind full of unrealistic expectations.Furthermore,the comment the naive students gave can be very negative and undeserved,which usual leads to popularity contest among teachers who are endeavoring to gain favor from students and get higher ranking instead of trying to be competent and responsible teachers.
Secondly,given the right to evaluate their teachers,the backward students tend to attribute their poor academic results to their teachers,which is very harmful for teachers` improvement.If the teachers constantly receive unwarranted criticism they will loose their motivation to effectively and confidence in teaching.
Finally,if the students are free to criticize their teachers, they would easily have psychological advantage and even misbehave in an intolerable way,thinking that their teachers are at their mercy.Besides,another common phenomenon that is very much likely to occur is that teachers are afraid of commenting on their students and correcting their mistakes because of being revenged .Consequently,teachers are bond to lose their authority self-respects.
In conclusion,allowing the high school students to assess on their teachers as they wish is not an appropriate method in education.In that case,the students indulge themselves in whatever they want to do,leaving no space for academic progress which is supposed to come from their teachers.

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