My first day

This is my first day at Itaki. I hope that I can involve my English language by practicing my language here. I have lots of dreams I want to achieve them, but these dreams depend upon good English. So I want to practice English here.

My first day

This is my first day at Itaki . I hope that I can involve improve my English language by practicing my language here.I have lots of dreams that I want to achieve them but these dreams depend upon good English. So I want to practice English here.

Nice job, well written. Just two changes - I think you may have meant 'improve' instead of 'involve'. Improve = to make better. Also a small correction to the third sentence.