Freedom.
I am a free soul. I can't stand any order or any obligation. I only do what my heart and my reason ask me to do. Never try to tame me, I will only run. Never try to make me behave under your rules, I will only break them and rebel. Never expect me to change myself for you, I will only show you more shades of my personality. People say I am stubborn, but in fact, I am only a nonconformist. They say I am against the law, but actually, none of them is as respectful of the law as me. My rebellion isn't about the law, it's about the social, the humans who try to enslave me to their vision of things, to the social rules they make, to the style they invent . Why should I follow a certain style or way of life when I can have mine? Was it written somewhere that we were supposed to listen to some kind of people? To follow a vogue they created? No, it wasn't .
So don't look at me strangely when you meet me in the street, because I know you will. I am in the streets of every city in this world. From the lost teenager with the weird style, the guy in his forties with the long hair and big colorful pants, the homeless person people underestimate and who has the most beautiful mind, to the pregnant mother proud of her body .
I am everywhere, maybe you don't see me in the crowd of the world , but I am there, and maybe you are like me, you have that thing somewhere tamed there, in your heart, not allowed to shine , not allowed to break free. Perhaps, you also have the rebellion and the freedom of the soul.
Wow! This was excellently written! And you have your English level at a zero? Someone's not telling the truth it seems. I just made a few corrections. I just corrected some spacing with the punctuation, a few words (and a suggestion) and a misspelling. This was really good. Something that I can relate with. You seem to have a great understanding of the grammar. I do think you need to work on how to to organize your writing when it comes to line spacing. It can really help with your expression and emphasize points in your writing that you want your readers to remember or feel strongly with. Also, line spacing can help make the text not seem so jumbled and not scare a reader. Usually if I don't see much spacing in a text, I really don't want to read it as it hurts my eyes, and sometimes I assume that it's probably not written well (which I was totally wrong in this case). Here's an example of what I mean:
Freedom
I am a free soul.
I can't stand any order or any obligation. I only do what my heart and my reason ask me to do.
Never try to tame me, I will only run.
Never try to make me behave under your rules, I will only break them and rebel.
Never expect me to change myself for you, I will only show you more shades of my personality.
People say I am stubborn, but in fact, I am only a nonconformist. They say I am against the law, but actually, none of them is as respectful of the law as me. My rebellion isn't about the law, it's about the social, the humans who try to enslave me to their vision of things, to the social rules they make, to the style they invent .
Why should I follow a certain style or way of life when I can have mine? Was it written somewhere that we were supposed to listen to some kind of people? To follow a vogue they created?
No, it wasn't .
So don't look at me strangely when you meet me in the street, because I know you will. I am in the streets of every city in this world. From the lost teenager with the weird style, the guy in his forties with the long hair and big colorful pants, the homeless person people underestimate and who has the most beautiful mind, to the pregnant mother proud of her body .
I am everywhere, maybe you don't see me in the crowd of the world , but I am there, and maybe you are like me, you have that thing somewhere tamed there, in your heart, not allowed to shine , not allowed to break free. Perhaps, you also have the rebellion and the freedom of the soul.
I am not sure if I organized it in a way that you like, but if you read the passage now, it looks more readable to a reader. I'm not sure if I emphasized the points that you wanted, but with the line spacing, it really does help emphasize points in your writing. Anyways, this was great. You really have a great grasp of grammer.
I was listening to a cover by The Mountain Goats while reading this. They were covering a song called "Boxcar" by Jawbreaker. The song actually almost can relate to this passage. Here it is for your musical enjoyment.
Freedom.
I am a free soul. I can't stand any order, any obligation. I only do what my heart and my reason ask me to. Never try to tame me, I will only run. Never try to make me behave under your rules, I will only break them and rebel. Never expect me to change myself for you, I will only show you more shades of my personality. People say I am stubborn, but in fact, I am only nonconformist, They say I am against the law, but actually, none of them is as respectful of the law as me. My rebellion isn't about the law, it's about sociaty, the humans who try to enslave me to their vision of things, to the social rules they make, to the style they invent . Why should I follow a certain style or way of life when I can have mine ? Was it written somewhere that we were supposed to listen to some kind of people ? To follow a vogue they created ? No, it wasn't .
So don't look at me strangely when you meet me in the street, because I know you will. I am in the streets of every city in this world. From the lost teenager with the weird style, the guy in his forties with the long hair and big colorful pants, the homeless person people underestimate and who has the most beautiful mind , to the pregnant mother proud of her body .
I am everywhere , maybe you don't see me in the crowd of the world , but i am there, and maybe you are like me, you have that thing somewhere tamed there, in your heart, not allowed to shine , not allowed to break free. Perhaps you also have the rebellion and the freedom of the soul.
