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(Hey ! It would be great if you could correct my brother's cover letter ! Thank you so much !)One year ago I had no idea what I could I do in the future. Then I discovered the American option at the Luzarches High School and I knew it was exactly what I wanted to do. My name is Baptiste; I'm 14. I have played chess for five years and I'm fond of reading. I'm very interested by find the American language and the American culture very interesting: sometimes I read Americans book, for example, "Endgame". I also love the American country. At school, my favourite subjects are maths, English and history. My favourite era is the twentieth century, especially that of the world wars. There are so many things I am crazy about regarding the United States, and the American section could help me to discover more and more things about this country than that I could discover by myself.
A year ago, I didn't know what I wanted to do for the future. Then, I discovered the American option at the Luzarches High School, and I knew it was exactly what I want to do. My name is Baptiste, and I'm 14 years old. I played chess for five years, and I'm fond of reading. I'm very interested in American language and American culture. Sometimes, I'll read American novels such as Endgame. I also love the American countryside. At school, my favorite subjects are Math, English and History. My favorite historical era is the twentieth century, particularly the World Wars. There are so many things about the United States that I am very interested in, and the American option will help me learn more things about the country than I could learn on my own.
*** I assume this is a cover letter for a private school at the pre-University level in the United States? If this is the case, I adjusted the phrasing of some of these sentences to cater to that audience. I also didn't highlight my changes (which I normally do) so you could see the CV in raw form. CVs can change quite a bit depending on the target audience. If any of my assumptions are off, let me know and I can adjust some things. That being said, I would recommend your brother focus more of the CV on the school he's applying to and not on the US itself (unless the school specifically asked "why the US?"). Educational institutions in the US generally like to hear about why people want to join their program in particular (e.g. distinguished academic history, value on education, etc.), but there are exceptions to this. Good luck!
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