HELP. Can someone correct my introduction .

Hello my name is Mary from Argentina. I was born and raised in Buenos Aires and I am currently coursing the 5 years of Ontology University, and this is my first time applying for this kind of program ( XXX Program for Students from Countries) I actually didn´t know about it until this year thanks to the XX Central Education whom kindly granted me all of the information and details needed for me to understand your program.
Firstly, I would like to explain the main reason why I´m applying for this program. As a half American half Argentina girl, I have always wanted to learn English because I didn´t want to lose the connection , the bridge with the American culture. Which was kind of hard for me because in my house I could only speak Castellano yet the American spirit and soul was there.
Literally speaking, being part of two cultures was, in my case, forcing me to choose just one and having to let the other one go. A choice that I didn´t dare - and did not want - to take because I didn´t want to forget who I was. And that´s why started to look for myself the other half of person that I really was, where I belonged or where I came from.
First of all, my desire to learn the American language led me to look for places where they were teaching it. I wish to clarify that I have already taken the exam for TTAIK I
So, as I was saying, my desire to learn English took me to look not only for American schools also programs that could give me the opportunity to go to EEUU to learn about their life and could experience in person how is to be born in the EEUU since I have never been there before. A program that can show and teach everything about the American culture. That can also show the life in different universities in EEUU, which I consider are different from Argentina´s Universities with their life style.
I'm the kind of person who has been known to put my mind and heart in what I believed in order to follow my dreams. That´s why I started to do my own research in my university for a program that would give me the opportunity or had a connection with the American student program but, unfortunately, I struggled to find any whatsoever. But knowing the way I am, I just couldn´t stay still with a no for an answer.
Finally, I found a program that could fill my expectations. From the bottom of my heart, I´m very excited with this program, which gives the students from different countries an incredibly amazing opportunity that should never be missed.
I´m looking forward for the opportunity to see and feel the reality of simply being part of the American society.

(Heya, Mary! I hope that this will help you get in! I shall cross my fingers for you!)

HELP. Can someone correct my introduction .

Hello, my name is Mary from Argentina. I was born and raised in Buenos Aires. I am currently coursing the 5 year of Ontology University, and this is my first time applying for this kind of program ( XXX Program for Students from Countries). I actually did not know about it until this year. Thanks to the XX Central Education who gave me kindly all the ins and outs of  the XXX Program for Students from Countries.

HELP. Can someone correct my introduction .

Hello my name is Mary from Argentina. I was born and raised in Buenos Aires. I currently coursing the 5 year of Ontology University, and this is my first time applying for this kind of program ( XXX Program for Students from Countries) I actually didn´t know about it until this year thanks to the XX Central Education which gave me kindly all the information and details about it.
Firstly I want to explain the main reason why I´m applying for this program. As a half American  half Argentina girl I ´ve always wanted to learn English because I didn´t want to lose the connection , the bridge with the American culture. Which was kind of hard for me because in my house I could only speak Castellano but the American spirit and soul still being there.
Literally speaking being part of two culture in my case it was making me to choose just one and letting the other one go. A choice that I didn´t dare and did not want to take I didn´t want to forget who I was. And that´s why I started to look for myself the other half of person that I really was, where I belong or where did I came from.
First of all my desired to learn the American language led me to look for places where they were teaching it. I want to clarify that I've already taken the exam for TTAIK I
So as I was saying my desired to learn English took me to look not only for American schools also programs that could give me the opportunity to go to EEUU to learn about their life and could experienced in person how is to be born in EEUU since I've never been there before. A program that can showes  me and teaches me everything about the American culture. That can also showes the life in different universities in EEUU, which I consider are different from Argentina´s Universities, their life style.
I'm the kind of person who put his mind and heart in what I believe in order to follow my dreams. That´s why I have sterted to make my own research in my university for a program that could gives me the opportunity or maybe has a connection with the American student program but unfortunately there wasn't one. But knowing the way I´am I just couldn´t stay still with a no as an answer.
Finally I found a program that could fill my expectations. From the bottom of my heart I´m very exciting with this program, which gives to the students from different countries an incredibly opportunity that one can not let it miss.
I´m looking forward for the opportunity to see and feel the really experience of being part of the American society.

Nice entry good luck in the States!