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Online shopping Nowadays the internet spread all over the world, shopping online is becoming very popular for young people. In the past four years, when I planned to buy something, the first thought coming out of my mind is to search on internet. Comparing the prices and viewing comments, I can buy anything I want on the internet, from small things to home appliance. It is quite convenient, but sometimes results were not satisfying, I found some of the actual commodities really disappointed me, bad quality, large distance between the real stuff with that of photoes shown on internet. The second negative side of shopping online is overspending, always bought those which I don't actually need, I bought just because I thought it was a bargain.

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 Hi Emma. You've made a great effort to include a good range of vocabulary in your writing and manage to get your points across. Well done!

1. Note how you tend to join whole clauses together with a comma (,). Unlike in Chinese, in English we can't do this and must use a conjunction (like 'and') or change the structure of one of the clauses.

2. In the first sentence, you are talking about the timeframe 'nowadays' while referring to something that has been completed at some point before now (the internet spreading over the world). For this, we use the present perfect tense (subject + have + past participle). In the last sentence, we also use the present perfect tense, this time because we are referring to our past experience ('I have always bought things').

Great job! 

Online shopping

Nowadays the internet has spread all over the world , s and shopping online is becoming very popular for young people. In the past four years, when I planned to buy something, the first thought coming out of my mind is was to search on the i Internet. By comparing the prices and viewing comments, I can buy anything I want on the internet, from small things to home appliances. It is quite convenient, but sometimes results were not satisfying. , I found some of the actual commodities really disappointed me. , They were of bad quality, a large distance between the real stuff and with that of photoes shown on internet. The second negative side of shopping online is overspending. , I have always bought things those which I don't actually need, I bought just because I thought they were it was a bargain.


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