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Some of our life style are changed by technology, is it good effect on us or not? Hi, guys how are you? I wrote an essay for IELTS writing test if you have time check it. "Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make?. Has this become a positive or negative development? In recent years, technology of our life has dramatically improved, while a lifestyle of people has been changing by developing technology. In addition, situation of our relations in society has became convenient more and more for contact each other. However, is this developing a positive for us? how this developing effect on our social life and what types of technologies are relating to us? In this essay, I will discuss about this topic along with my point of different views by showing some examples. Firstly, technology has creative a new way of our shopping. In other word, it is common thing that people have some online services for getting what ever products they want. This reason why is we can get a lot of things by using online services without visiting any places. This means we can save our own time because we do not need to spare time for going to buy products if you have electric gadget. Secondly, technology has turned to our relations in the world on more closely than before. It would say that we can share a lot of information to foreign countries. At the same time people could get more opportunity for having knowledge about them . For example, if you want to know about a place in foreign country you never visit there before when you go to traveling, online network gives you that country is safety or not for visitor. In this case, you can prevent to face bad situation for your traveling. On the other hand, people have less opportunity for going to outside. It has turned our life in social on a meager life of human. The reason that is people could have done a lot of things on online for contact each other,meeting about their work, buying some products, correcting information. That has changed our life more convenient, while people have lost for having a opportunity of conversation. In conclusion, we could have saved our own time in society by improving technology but it might be changed our lifestyle to lack of conversation for people. In my opinion, technology has a positive effect on our life even if it has a handful of negative causes for us because we have more flexible time, and then we can spend it to other things.

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Some of our life styles are changed by technology, does it have a good effect on us or not?

Hi, guys how are you? I wrote an essay for IELTS writing test if you have time check it.
"Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make?. Has this become a positive or negative development?

In recent years, technology in our lives has dramatically improved, while people's lifestyle has been changing by developing technology. In addition, the situation of our relations in society has become more and more convenient more and more for contacting each other. However, is this development having a positive effect on us? how this developing effect What is the effect of this development on our social life  and what types of developing is relating to us? (I'm sorry I don't understand what you mean here) In this essay, I will discuss about this topic along with my point of different view by using some examples.

Firstly, technology has a creative a new way for our shopping. In other words, it is common thing for people to have some online services for purchasing whatever products they want. This is the reason why is we can buy a lot of things by using online services without visiting any places, which means we can save our own time because we do not need to spare time to go buy products if you have an electric gadget.

Secondly, technology has turned to our relations in the world on closer than before ("has made world relations/international relations closer than before" might be better). It would say that We can share a lot of information to foreign countries, while at the same time people have more opportunities to have knowledge of what happens there. For example, if you want to know about a place in a foreign country you never visit there when you go to traveling, online network gives you that country is safety or not for visitor. In this case, you can prevent to face bad situation for your traveling.  ("If you travel to a foreign country you've never visited before and you want to learn about it, you can research online whether or not that country is safe for visitors/tourists/travelers" might be better)

On the other hand, people have less opportunity to go outside. It has turned our social life on a meager life of human (sorry I don't quite understand what you mean here either). The reason that is that people could have done a lot of things on online for contacting each other,meeting about their work, buying some products, correcting information. That has made our life more convenient, while people have lost for having an opportunity for conversation.

In conclusion, we could have saved our own time in society by improving technology but it might have changed our lifestyle to lack of conversation for people. In my opinion, technology has a positive effect on our lives even if it has a handful of negative effects for us because we have more flexible time, that we can spend on other things.

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