Sarah
is this logically okay? or any problem>? We may also use some equipment to keep fit. Because many people live with a sedentary lifestyle which would probably result in obesity and they would want to lose some weight. You know, we don’t need to worry about the weather and we can do some sports even in rainy days.
4 Ağu 2015 08:20
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The sentences don't have any "error" per se, except "in rainy days" (should be "on"). But that doesn't mean they read very well - I find many parts unnatural and strange sounding. (like the vague "some" being overused, the expression "do some sports", etc) Also the last two sentences can be structured better than tying sub-clauses with "and", I think. But it is more a style and clarity issues than outright "problems".
4 Ağustos 2015
Submit in the Notebook section so that people can conveniently correct.
4 Ağustos 2015
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