mail to professor
Is there any grammatical mistakes in the following letter which I'm going to send to my professor? Does it need any amendments?
Dear professor XX;
Back to our previous conversation, you gave me the opportunity to write a conference paper by comparing the results of experiments E5 and E7 from the doctoral dissertation of Dr. YY.
As you are aware, I handed in a draft version of the paper within a week after your approval; however, at that time you ordered me to change some parts of the manuscript without exactly specifying them. After applying some changes, I've attached the revised script to this email.
I understand that you are busy these days, but please let me know if it needs any amendments at your earliest convenience.
sincerely;
ZZ
****P.S. : I really need this email to be overly formal and without any mistakes. So I would appreciate any suggestions to improve the above script toward "perfection" :)