Could I improve it better?
Honor among one of the 4th best design projects, at my university for 2015.2, presented in an international creative economy conference runner by CVM (Securities and Exchange Commission of Brazil)

(it's for a resume!)

Question

Could I improve it better?
Honor among one of the 4th best design projects, at my university for 2015.2, presented in an international creative economy conference runner by CVM (Securities and Exchange Commission of Brazil)

(it's for a resume!)

Answer

Hi Luiza,

I have revised it to make it a bit more professional, let me know if you have any additional questions.

Honored to be among one of the four best design projects at my NAME HERE University in 2015. 
-A suggestion would be to put the name of your University instead.

Presented in an international economy conference hosted by the Securities and Exchange Commission of Brazil.
-I wouldn't use abbreviations in a professional resume.

Let me know if you have any questions.

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