Please help me correct this essay. I have been practising for the upcoming IELTS examination. "Some people think watching TV is bad for children, while others think watching TV has more beneficial effects on children. Discuss 2 sides. " *** Recently, media network, especially television, has been paid an attention because of its significant impacts on society. Although watching television has been affecting children in some detrimental ways, it has been playing a substantial role in the youth’s life. *** There are a variety of reasons why spending time on television is not advantageous. Firstly, television has influenced directly on children’s health, including vision and brain system, which leads to several health issues. For example, a child addicted to watching television is more likely to have serious problems relating to his brain development. Secondly, since media producers have focused on their benefits, almost created TV shows have no educational value, coupled with the existence of unhealthy videos, such as violent and sexual clips, bringing more negative influences to the youth. As a result, children waste their time and energy on their favorite shows, having no awareness of their bad effect. *** On the other hand, there are not without advantages for watching television. Since television has a myriad of choices for audiences, it is an ideal entertaining transport for the youth. This means that, instead of playing other dangerous outdoor sports, children could stay safely at home and watch a beneficial film. Also, if parents are conscious of the importance of watching educational shows, there will not without related document films and videos that are conducive for their children. Learning through watching is an effective and interesting way, contributing to visual ability and children’s cognitive. *** In conclusion, watching television has both particular impacts on children’s life. Even if its benefits have tended to outweigh its drawbacks, the influence of watching TV relies considerably on the TV user’s attitude.

Advantages and disadvantages of study abroad. In recent years, Education tends to be paid more attention, which contributes to the fact that students concern about not only domestic educational environment but also foreign one. Although there still exists many limitations, this tendency is applauded by many people. *** On the one hand, there are a number of disadvantages of study abroad. First, in order for children to be able to study aboard, wealthy families have to pay a large expense for their children of living overseas. In fact, since not every family can afford to invest in Education, overseas students have to get a part-time job in an attempt to maintain their lives abroad, which contributes to their less attention on study. Second, due to be unfamiliar with strange environment, overseas students are more likely to be isolated from those living in developed countries. As a result, it is difficult for them to get on well with modern study environment and settle down in their personal lives. *** On the other hand, study aboard is substantial for the variety of advantages. First, as being got acquaint themselves with advanced education and professional environment, students have a great chance to improve themselves considerably in their majors. For example, developed countries with advanced education, such as the United States and England, are conductive for students to expand their horizon in many significant areas, including in the field of natural energy system. Second, if a person study abroad, they can extend relationship and learn diverse cultures. This means that students can open their view and get valuable experience for their jobs after graduate. *** In conclusion, given the clear advantages study abroad has, there are still limitations. By acknowledging these limitations, people who have intention of study overseas can find ways to dodge them.

Role of education in society. In recent years, education has been a dispensable sector of society’s progress. Although domestic education has not been advanced like in develop countries, it still has a significant role influencing every social aspect of humankind. *** It is clear that education has a positive impact on human’s cognition. First, since being educated, citizens have recognized moral standards to construct themselves rules of relevant behaviour. As a result, nowadays fewer educated people are involved in brutal and illegal crimes contributing to social growth. Second, a stable education allows residents to build a knowledge base that plays an essential role in their lives. In fact, in order to get a high salary job, candidates are more likely to be required to have a master’s degree, especially in medicine and security. **** It has been true in some cases that education is a condition conductive to economic and politic successes. First, since businessmen are educated basically how to produce essential goods, manufacture progress would work smoothly without any technical errors, which contributes fast economic development. For example, if blue collars don not comprehend manufacture mechanism, they could not use complicated electrical equipment and machines. Beside, as the authorities are unbiased in politic viewpoint, they are more likely to decide objectively party lines. This means that governmental leaders have to enhance their politic knowledge to ensure right policies. *** In conclusion, education plays a significant role in every social aspect, including cognition, economy, and even politics. Government and corporations worldwide should take steps to ensure that education influences positively human beings.

please, correct my essay! Essay: A new factory should be built in your hometown. Do you agree or disagree? In recent years, industrial development has been receiving a great deal of media attention around the world due to its negative impacts on human life. Although the majority of people do not support to build more plants, investigating in industry, especially constructing new factories, still contributes to people’s mutual benefits. One of the most compelling reasons is that it works for the welfare of the nation. First, since new factories are constructed, there are more chances of getting job for every individual in contemporary society, which leads to the decreasing in the proportion of unemployment. In fact, if local government hesitates to carry on innovating industrial system, there would be serious struggles appearing in all most citizen’s life, such as losing job and being deficient in food and necessary implements. Second, building more factories allows the country to grow in economy, especially in good’s manufacture and export, contributing to the increasing globalization of the nation economy. This means that modernising in industry acts as an incentive for citizen to work harder to take the chance of renewing and rebuilding a better nation. In addition, having more factories built in Vietnam ensures happiness of every individual in society. First, factories are environment conductive to work since worker has a safe place to work and a stable salary as well as different benefits paid for them. For example, blue-collar are more likely to content to work in factory than in field as blue- collar is paid after retiring while famer is not. Not only that, factories built in worker’s hometown tend to be close their houses, which is a condition conductive to commute easier. Therefore, they can commute to work without paying any traveling expenses, saving a great deal of money. In conclusion, constructing new factories is one of the most efficient solutions to economic depression that contributes partly to mutual benefit. However, authority and corporation worldwide should take steps to ensure that they do not have any serious impacts on human beings.

My mistake Everyone makes mistakes in their life, so do I. I have made mistakes many times and the mistake in my childhood, when I was 5 years old, is the most unforgettable one. It was the time when my friends and I were not old enough to go to primary school, and thus we had much spare time together. Usually, we did not take a nap, hidden under the branch of star fruit trees, told spirit legends and imagined that we were main characters in tales of magic. Maybe, it is the best time in my life when I was innocent and must not worry about anything. However, one day, I made a ridiculous mistake making my friends isolate me several days. Certainly, our best friends team fraternized and promised that we would never betray the others in the rest of our life. Unfortunately, on a very hot noon, when we were playing with the bunch of red chilies which we picked up in the garden, I wiped my hands on face and I felt extremely intense burning eyes. I busted out crying and yelled aloud. My mother ran out of the house immediately and took me into. She washed my face with water and used medicine to heal my eyes. After, my mother asked me what happened to me and why my eyes get hurt. Because of being ashamed of behavior I told lies. I said it is Linh’s mistakes that she wiped many chilies into my eyes. My mother was angry, she scolded Linh for her bad behavior. She cried a lot and did not say anything. Not only did I tremble, but also to be scared and regretted all my words. But, I could not say anything. As a result, all my friends who witnessed the story were angry with me about a week. I felt so sad, and I had the guts to tell the truth to my mother and apologized Linh for my behavior. Linh forgave me and we were our best friends again. Even though it is a mistake I made when I was not mature, it printed deeply in my mind as both fault and my unforgettable memory.

An invitation letter September 21, 2016 To Wiliam Salazar Dear teacher, Would you be interested in disguising activities? On the 31, October, in 2016, our class are going to have a special meeting for the day of the dead- Halloween day. We are preparing and planning for that day and we intend to organize a costume competition. Thus, we want to invite you to attend the meeting as a jury of the competition. Maybe it will be fairer if you- our admirable teacher marks our costume teams. We really hope that you can spend your precious time on our Halloween day. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Student Cao Huong

Travelling There are many ways of discovering the whole world. Travelling is one of them. ** Travelling is concerned as an efficient way of developing all aspects of life. First, travellers can reinforce their knowledge from experience lessons during their journeys. Having a wide knowledge means getting more chance to succeed. Actually, the new lands always bring everyone many new ideas. That is why most success people, as well as the famous novelist, tend to travel as much as they are possible. Second, travelling is probably the best way to challenge yourself and to be more mature. To travel alone, people must be equipped with necessary social skills to be able to both solve serious issues and overcome critical accidents. Recently, there are more and more adolescents having a gap to travel several countries in different continents before signing up the university. Someone said that:” Life begins at the end of your comfort zone”, to start a new life with many new experiences, let you go. ** However, it is not easy to travel from end to end. Travellers must spend a lot of time and money on their journeys. Besides,having decided to travel means you have to choose a risky life. Sometimes, you can be infected serious diseases or you must face to danger and disaster, Moreover, it is not suitable for people without the good health. In short, learning from travelling is quite good but not everyone is able to do it. ** In conclusion, even though travelling brings people many great lessons, it has some detriment. Anyway, overcoming all difficulties to get the chance of travelling maybe help you are out of the comfort zone to live a meaning life.

The first time I have tried to write a complain letter. September 13, 2016 To manager at "Style" shop Dear Sir, On September 12, I purchased a coat in your shop. It is a thick blue coat which has a quite high price. I tried it on and felt satisfied before checking out. However, when I came back home and checked details, I realised that there are rags in the collar of the coat. I am really disappointed. I have still kept the mark and its receipt fully. I am writing this letter to let you know that I am not pleased with your product. Therefore, I would be grateful if you could exchange from the coat to a new one. Actually, I wait for your response. I am looking forward to hearing from you! Cao Huong