could someone help me revise this essay, thank u very much~~ The coca-cola company has not only provided Chinese customers with a wide variety of soft drinks, but also, increased the development of Ch

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could someone help me revise this essay, thank u very much~~ The coca-cola company has not only provided Chinese customers with a wide variety of soft drinks, but also, increased the development of Chinese economy in terms of employment, tax revenue, local purchasing, and personnel training it brings with it, etc. At the same time, The coca-cola company has for a long time spared no effort to support nationwide and regional social and public welfare undertakings, such as rural education, adolescent health, Aids prevention, rainwater harvesting, farmer training and disaster relief as well as the water resource conservation project under its partnership with WWF (world wildlife fund) and UNDP and disaster relief donations. The total of its donation fund reaches more than 0.2 billion RMB.

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could someone help me revise this essay, thank u very much~~

The coca-cola company has not only provided Chinese customers with a wide variety of soft drinks, but also, increased contributed to the development of the Chinese economy in terms of employment, tax revenue, local purchasing, and personnel training it brings with it, etc. At the same time, the Coca-Cola company, in partnership with WWF (world wildlife fund) and UNDP company,<em> (better to put these together)</em> has for a long time spared no effort to support nationwide and regional social and public welfare undertakings, such as rural education, adolescent health, Aids prevention, rainwater harvesting, farmer training and disaster relief, as well as the water resource conservation project under its partnership with WWF (world wildlife fund) and UNDP and disaster relief donations <em>(too long and involved a sentence)</em>. The total of its donation fund has reached more than 200 million 0.2 billion RMB.