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Respect for the ones that are not as ‘brilliant’ as you are. Please write a correction. I have a girl in my athletic training group. She works in administration. Yesterday, she was complaining about a girl doing an internship with her. The internship girl is probably not that intelligent. But, I am not really impressed by her, the girl in my training group, either. If I would comment on people that are less intelligent than I am, I could go on the whole day too. Also, I know that intelligence is just something you get from nature, from your DNA. I did not do much in high school, and I would get the highest notes anyway. I was admired. Then I had to play soccer for the school team, and I sucked. I was hated. But I probably did more effort becoming a good soccer player than I did studying math and physics. I did not like it when she told me she looked down at a girl that is not as smart as she is. And I also know, I am probably a lot smarter than she is, should I put her down too? If just genetically inherited intelligence is a measure, I could also put you down, and never stop.
2013年5月16日 14:39
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I have a There is this girl in my athletic training group.* She works in administration. Yesterday, she was complaining about a girl who is doing an internship with her. The internship girl is probably not that intelligent. But, I am not really impressed by her, the girl in my training group, either. If I would commented on people that are less intelligent than I am, I could go on the whole day, too. Also, I know that intelligence is just something you get from nature, from your DNA. I did not do much in high school, and I would get the highest notes grades anyway. I was admired. Then I had to play soccer for the school team, and I sucked. I was hated. But I probably did put more effort into becoming a good soccer player than I did studying math and physics. I did not like it when she told me she looked down at on a girl that is not as smart as she is. And I also know, I am probably a lot smarter than she is. Should I put her down, too? If just genetically inherited intelligence is a measure of value, I could also put you** down, too, and never stop.

 

* If you teach or lead the athletic training group you would say "I have a girl." If you are a member of the group you say "There is a girl."


** Who does "you" refer to here? If it refers to the girl it should be "her." As it is you are implying you could put the reader down!

 

Your writing is easy to understand. Good job!

2013年5月22日
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