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Dear Sir or Madam, On behalf of all the students in our university, I am writing to invite you to attend the graduation ceremony which is to be held on June 25th. This ceremony will be held in the Grand Auditorium, start from 1:00pm and last for approximately 4 hours. The main rituals include the headmaster giving a speech that conveys his corgratulations and best wishes to all the graduates, rewarding the graduation certificates to every students and a closing singing performance. As well as that, it is suggested to dress formally since there will be a group phototaking and some students would like to take commemorate photos with you. After the ceremony, you can have dinner in the No.I Canteen where dishes will be prepared. Your attendance will be highly appreciated. Please don't hesitate to contract me if you have any further questions. kind regards, LiMing
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Dear Sir or Madam, On behalf of all the students in our university, I am writing to invite you to attend the graduation ceremony which is to be held on June 25th. This ceremony will be held in the Grand Auditorium, to start at 1:00pm and last for approximately 4 hours (and is expected to end at 5:00pm). The main items/events on the program include the headmaster giving a speech that conveys his congratulations and best wishes to all the graduates, awarding the graduation certificates to all students and a closing singing performance. It is suggested to dress formally since there will be a group photo taking and some students would like to take commemoration photos with you. After the ceremony, you can have dinner in the No.I canteen where dishes will be prepared. (After the ceremony, you can proceed to the ... where dinner will be served) Your attendance will be highly appreciated. (I would be most grateful if you could RSVP by June 23rd, thank you). Please don't hesitate to contact me if you have any further questions. kind regards, LiMing
"Ritual" is usually for religious ceremonies or things done out of habit. It doesn't work well here. "As well as that" : I suggest deleting this since you changed from the programme events to dress attire. Finally, you can insert an RSVP if you like. It is to request a reply to confirm or decline their attendance. It is quite common on invitations.
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Dear Sir or Madam, On behalf of all the students in our university, I am writing to invite you to attend the graduation ceremony which is to be held on June 25th. This ceremony will take place (to avoid repeating “be held”) in the Grand Auditorium, start at 1:00pm and last for approximately 4 hours. The main events will include the headmaster giving a speech that conveys his congratulations and best wishes to all the graduates, awarding the graduation certificates to every student and a closing singing performance. Formal dress is suggested since there will be a group photo and some students would like to take commemorative photos with you. After the ceremony, you can have dinner in the No.I Canteen (you expect dishes to be prepared there. You could say special dishes). Your attendance would be highly appreciated. Please don't hesitate to contact me if you have any further questions. kind regards, LiMing
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