wendy
For a man who always struggle with his life and doesn't have enough money to pay for the basic needs, where can the happiness come from? I think the happiness is usually far away from him too.On the opposite side, a rich man may not be happy either because of that he can't feel happy about his life with a lot of people surround him and who just want to get benefits from him.This remainds me of a old story that happened around 500 AD in China, when someone told a emperor that thousands of people died of hunger in disasters, he said :why didn't they eat meat? From this story we can find that for a rich person who never experienced any rough time in his life,he can't really understand what his good life refer to him and all the stuff he owns doesn't make sense for him.So, he can't feel happy.For those people who are afraid of being dead without enough food, they wouldn't have chance to experience the happy life. Happiness is the goal of everyone's life, money plays an important role in our lives.If the rich people can help poor people and let them feel the care from others, I think all of them will feel happy.So, money is not the key to be happy, the value of money is, only when you use your money to make value it can give you happiness.
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For a man who always struggle with his life and doesn't have enough money to pay for his basic needs, where can the happiness come from? I think that he is also far from being happy too. On the other hand, a rich man may not feel happy about his life either because he is surrounded by a lot of people who just want to get benefits from him. This reminds me of an old story that happened around 500 AD in China, when someone told an emperor that thousands of people died of hunger in disasters, he asked: why didn't they eat meat? From this story we can realize that rich people who never experienced any rough time in their life can't really understand that all their comfort and all the stuff they own seems insignificant, so they can't feel happy. For those people who are afraid of dying of starvation, they wouldn't have a chance to experience a happy life. Happiness is everyone’s goal in life, money plays an important role in our lives. If the rich people can help poor people and let them feel that someone is here to care for them, I think they will all feel happy. So, money is not the key to happiness, the virtue of money is. Only when you use your money in a virtuous manner it can give you happiness.
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For a man who always struggle with his life and doesn't have enough money to pay for their basic needs then where can the happiness come from? and I think that the happiness is usually far away from him too. On the opposite side/on the other way, a rich man may not be happy either because of, he can't feel happy for his life because there are a lot of people around him every time, who just want to get benefits from him. This reminds me about a old story that happened around 500 AD in China, when someone told a emperor that thousands of people died of hunger, he said :why didn't they eat meat?. From this story we can find that for a rich person who never experienced any hard time in his entire life, can't understand what his life refers to him and all the stuff or tantrum, he owns or does, doesn't make any sense for him. So, he can't feel really happy. For those people who are afraid of being dead because of hunger or not getting enough food, they wouldn't even have chance to live the happy life. At the end, Happiness is the ultimate goal of everyone's life and money plays an important role in that. If the blessed or rich people help poor people and let them feel care from them then I think everyone will feel happy. So, money is not a key to be happy but it's the source to give you and others a lot of happiness.
Trying to write in a simple sentences and don't use same lines in a different ways in a same paragraph.
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For a man who always struggle with his life and doesn't have enough money to pay for the basic needs, where can the happiness come from? I think the happiness is usually far away from him too.On the opposite side, a rich man may not be happy either because of that he can't feel happy about his life with a lot of people surround him and who just want to get benefits from him.This remainds me of a old story that happened around 500 AD in China, when someone told a emperor that thousands of people died of hunger in disasters, he said :why didn't they eat meat? From this story we can find that for a rich person who never experienced any rough time in his life,he can't really understand what his good life refer to him and all the stuff he owns doesn't make sense for him.So, he can't feel happy.For those people who are afraid of being dead without enough food, they wouldn't have chance to experience the happy life. Happiness is the goal of everyone's life, money plays an important role in our lives.If the rich people can help poor people and let them feel the care from others, I think all of them will feel happy.So, money is not the key to be happy, the value of money is, only when you use your money to make value it can give you happiness.
1. Space between every end of a period and beginning of the next sentence. 2. Tighten this ship up: “On the opposite side, a rich man may not be happy either, because of that, he can't feel happy about his life. With a lot of people surround him and who just want to get benefits from him.” 1. He has a lot of people surrounding him who only wants his Benefits. 1.2 A lot of people surround him, who only want him for his benefits. 1.3 I’m tired and high, good night
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