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Today, I went a walk and shopping with my family. I went a walk nearby park to shopping bills. It was good weather to walk. When I walk to the park, I saw some people with dogs. I thought it was good to walk with dogs at that time. I like to walk and see nature around. Usually, I can’t have the time to walk because of my school schedule. In the holidays, I like to walk and feel outside if I don’t have anything to do. I like to walk during the traveling. When I went to Kyoto, I walk through path of philosophy. It took about an hour and I enjoyed. There were a small river on the left side and the path on the right side. I could see some cafes and seasonal greens. Some cafes were closed because of New Year holidays. I saw some camellia which was red, pink and white. I could feel the winter season from the flowers. After I went a walk, I ate a lunch. It was fried fish set meal. It contains fried fish, salad, miso soup, rice, pickled radish and Kinpira Gobo. I like to eat Japanese food set meal so I often go to eat the restaurant.
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Today, I went for a walk and went shopping with my family. I walked near a park before heading to the shops. The weather was good for a walk. As I walked through the park, I saw some people with dogs and thought it was a good time to walk with them. I enjoy walking and observing nature. Usually, I do not have the time to walk because of my school schedule. During the holidays, I like to walk and feel the outdoors if I do not have anything else to do. I enjoy walking while traveling. When I went to Kyoto, I walked through the Path of Philosophy. It took about an hour, and I enjoyed it. There was a small river on the left side and a path on the right side. I saw some cafes and seasonal greenery. Some cafes were closed because of the New Year holidays. I saw camellias that were red, pink, and white. I could feel the winter season through the flowers. After my walk, I ate a lunch of fried fish set meals. It contained fried fish, salad, miso soup, rice, pickled radish, and kinpira gobo. I often go to restaurants to eat Japanese set meals because I like them.
Today's writing about your walk and lunch was very vivid and enjoyable to read. You've done well in sharing your experiences in detail, especially when describing the Path of Philosophy in Kyoto and the varieties of camellia flowers. It's great to see your appreciation for nature and cultural experiences. To enhance your writing further, focus on using past tense consistently for past activities and ensuring sentence structure flows smoothly. Keep up the good work, and continue exploring and writing about your experiences!
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