[Practice1]Please help to correct and modify it to more commonly by english native use. [thankyou]
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Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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I disagree for the opinion of admin themselves on their own
I always think that the parent should let the child decide themselves on their own. No matter how the things they do is big or small, they have their own brain, and parent can not together with their child for all the time while the child the whole life, that is not mean to the child should not take part in the pubic activities, but at least the parent should let the child make plan by the way they interesting with. Human is the social animals, we have this important paremeter during the days we alive everyday, please don’t worried about we will become alone. I am a father and have a son in seven year old and primary school, some students in his class have less time to have their game when spare time, parents will say many words to them and register much class outside school with English training, sing song, painting and so on, after talked with my son with this situation, children will talk about the real inner thing to the good friends, All the free time in occupied by the decision of their parents. In other words, they lose theirself sometimes.
Children should t learn how to make plans for themselves. This is much good for the time when they study in college or work. There is no way to get this point in one day, it must be trained in right way from their parents at the beginning.
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[Practice1]Please help to correct and modify it to more commonly by english native use. [thankyou]
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Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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I disagree for the opinion of admin themselves on their own
Unclear. What does 'admin themselves' mean?
I always think that the parent should let the child decide themselves on their own.
'themselves' or 'on their own', but not both
No matter whether the things they do are big or small, they have their own brain, and parents can not be together with their child for all the time for their whole life. That does not mean to the child should not take part in the pubic activities, but at least the parent should let the child make plans based on their own interests. Humans are social animals, this is an important aspect of every day of our lives, please don’t be worried that we will end up alone. I am a father and have a seven year old son in primary school. Some students in his class have less free time to play, parents are always talking to them and signing them up for many classes outside of school, such as English training, singing, painting and so on. After talking with my son about this situation, children will talk about their real inner feelings to their good friends. All their free time is occupied by the decisions of their parents. In other words, they lose themselves sometimes.
This is all one sentence? Much too long. Different sentences for different ideas/points.
Children should t learn how to make plans for themselves. This is very good for the time when they study in college or work. There is no way to get to this point in one day, it must be trained in the right way from their parents from the beginning.
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