Correct this entry? It's too long and there are too many mistakes to correct it completely so I will begin with formatting. Pay attention to the details regarding formatting; a blank line separates paragraphs. The big mistake which is many is vocabulary. Who wrote this entry? You? Microsoft Word or Google? The vocabulary is really streching the meanings of many words and to completely correct this entry we must use better vocabulary word by word. I suggest you do that yourself first and then resubmit. You are also having trouble with the verbs, if you make mistakes with the irregular verbs others will have trouble understanding you and understanding is the bottom line when it comes to language.
Your argument must be on every school's curriculum this year, other students are arguing the same question or present situation in China. Please make sure about your facts before wielding them as the truth - any student would fall on their head in life if they tried.



