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gudaguda diary I 'll write this three days. I went back to my parent's home on Friday.I have a lot of things to do:paper ,prepare to cram school,study of exam(secretary,bookkeeping,kanji)and so on but in the train I abstracted and viewed green from the window. I got tired and feel like drinking alcohol so I tried buying it but clerk stopped.I'm 20 really,and in Japan it's regal but she doubted.so I couldn't buy. next day,I got up early. this day is held Aoi festival which has held since 6th century. aoimaturi is three big festivals,is one of the most solemn and graceful.there parade people who wear kimono of Heian period.I arrived at Kyoto imperial palace before one hour.but many people came already.until start we were boring so I spoke to another visitor. after seeing the festival,we went to MacDonald's and talked. like this: friend said ,hey,why don't we go to Korea this summer? I said ,yeah,good. It sounded like when Ii was nvited karaoke.because visiting Korea is very chap. I'm looking forward to it. from noon,I promise another friend,so we said goodbye. I met next friend first time for a year.we took on the bus,and visited ginkakuji temple, which was beautiful.like kinkakuji it isn't gorgeous but I think it's very Japanese.I bought some souvenirs for dormitory's friends here. next,we enjoyed shopping, purikura, dinner. I wanted talk to her more,but we had to say bye. and I went to the beauty salon,where I cut my hair 7 cm and permanent. next day I went to Nara.this year just 1300year from starting of heijyoukyou(平城京). first,we visited kasugataisya.and next,hijyoukyou trace. It 's very wide space.there,we wear cloth nara period.it was exciting because here,same place we were in through time of 1300 . it was nice weekend^^I like my friends.

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It sounds very interesting.

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Great job on this diary! I liked your story and I could understand everything you said. Can I help you a little with the first paragraph? I will use CAPITALS where I change something.

I 'll write this ABOUT three days.
I went back to my parent's home on Friday. I have a lot of things to do: paper, prepare FOR cram school, study FOR MY exam (secretary, bookkeeping, kanji)and so on, but in the train I GOT DIStracted and viewed (HERE, MAYBE "WATCHED" SOUNDS A LITTLE MORE NATURAL) THE green from the window.
I got tired and feLT like drinking alcohol so I tried buying it but THE clerk stopped ME. I'm 20 really, and in Japan it's Legal but she doubted ME. So I couldn't buy ANY.

All these changes are mostly little particles. When I write in Japanese, I think the particles are the most confusing too. I think there are a few more particles you could fix in the other paragraphs, but don't worry! You are able to write a long story that makes sense in English. I like your writing a lot! I hope next time the clerk will let you buy some alcohol! 


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