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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment.
Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with to living in an apartment?
Everybody (or; everyone) knows about the freedom when they live in their own home, so they try to realize the dream of making a better place for them (or; themselves). Nevertheless, people are not able to reach their goals due to a lack of money, hence they manage to live in an apartment, although many difficulties have to be faced.
It is clear that there are many advantages of living in a house with when compared to the living an apartment, yet the preference is depends on the personal views and financial circumstances. When people live in an apartment they have to take care of all the items provided by the landlord. Otherwise; they have to pay additional money for broken or lost properties. In addition, according to the contract signed by them, they have to extend the agreement or find another house as soon as the contract period is has expired. Therefore it is dangerous for a family which (or; that) is consisted (or; consists) of cuddly (or; cute?) little kids.
However, residing (into?) a new house is actually (or; can be only) a dream yet many government and private banks are ready to help those who want financial aid. We should have a separate place for us in this world to live as our wish (sentence is confusing). Even though people do not have much money, they live in happy happiness (or; they live happily) because they have already achieved one of their basic needs. Consequently, they can get any decision on the house of repairing, painting, reconstructing, etc, without considering an external person like a landlord. They do not want to allocate money monthly but they can save it in a bank for future purposes.
Thus it is better to live in a house. Even if we are unable to complete it, it would be a benefit for our younger generation to continue it (consider the use of 'it') and they will enjoy the life without being dependant on others.
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