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Computers and Internet The second Oral English Subject: Computer and Internet: 1、When I was 12 years old, I contact computer for the first time in the computer room of my primary school learning Pinyin and Wubi typing. 2、In 2002, when I was 14, I surfed the internet for the first time and download my first QQ which has been used for 11 years so far. 3、Now the most often things I do through computer is working、contact、shopping、design、entertainment(for example, reading novels, watching movies and so on). 4、Computer and network which is closely related to our life changes my life and accompanies me to grow. 5、I made a lot of friends through the internet which opened my eyes. 6、I watched many films through the network which enriched my life. 7、I published my story on the network and then my first book was published. 8、I looked for a job by sending resume online and then I got one which I like. 9、I like surfing the internet but do not indulge in it. 10、If you are asked to bring some things to an uninhabited island what will you choose? One of my choices is a computer with 3G network.
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If the island was uninhabited - unless it was very close to the mainland, or another inhabited island, you would not get 3G coverage!
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Computers and Internet

The second Oral English Subject: Computer and Internet:

1, When I was 12 years old, I contact[1] computer for the first time in the computer room of my primary school learning Pinyin and Wubi typing.

2, In 2002, when I was 14, I surfed the internet for the first time and downloaded my first QQ[2] which I have been using for 11 years so far.

3, Now the things I do most often with a computer are working, [3]contact, shopping, design, and entertainment(for example, reading novels, watching movies and so on).

4, Computer and network which is closely related to our life changes my life and accompanies me to grow. [4]

5, I made a lot of friends through the internet which opened my eyes.

6, I watched many films through the network which enriched my life.

7, I published my story on the network and then my first book was published.

8, I looked for a job by sending resumes online and then I got one which I like.

9, I like surfing the internet but do not overindulge in it.

10, If you are asked to bring some things to an uninhabited island what will you choose? One of my choices would be a computer with 3G network.

[1] - 'Used a' or 'had contact with a'

[2] - 'downloaded QQ for the first time' or 'made my first download of QQ'.

[3] - You are using an odd comma (,). I have highlighted these with grey

[4] - I'm not sure what you are trying to say here. This needs rephrasing to make it clearer.

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