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일지 2 안녕하세요! 어떻게 지내세요? 잘지내요? 저는…잘지내요. 저 언제 이 아침에 일어나서 배 아팠어요. 그래서 약을 먹었어요. 그런데 이 주에 너무 바빴어요. 오늘까지 한가한 시간이 전혀 없었어요. 지난 주말 Disneyworld에 갔어요. 너무 재미있어요. 그리고 Magic Kingdom에 Minnie Mouse Ears 사고 많이 밥을 먹었어요. 지난 주말에 뭐 했어요? 이 주말에 뭐 할거예요? 오늘 토요일이예요. 오늘 밤에 뭐 할거예요? 같이 영화를 볼까요? 뭘 영화 보고싶어요? Star Trek 볼래요, Ironman 3 볼래요? Hello! How are you? Are you doing well? I’m…doing well. When I woke up this morning I had stomach pain. So I took medicine. But this week I have been really busy. Until today I didn’t have any free time. Last weekend I went to Disneyworld. It was really fun. And at Magic Kingdom I bought Minnie Mouse ears and ate alot of food. What did you do last weekend? What are you doing this weekend? Today is Saturday. Tonight what are you going to do? Shall we watch a movie together? What movie do you want to see? Do you want to watch Star Trek or Ironman 3?
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일지 2(일기 2)

안녕하세요! 어떻게 지내세요? 잘지내요? 저는…잘지내요. 저 언제 이 아침에 일어나서 배 아팠어요. 그래서 약을 먹었어요. 그런데 이 주에 너무 바빴어요. 오늘까지 한가한 시간이 전혀 없었어요.

지난 주말 Disneyworld에 갔어요. 너무 재미있어요. 그리고 Magic Kingdom에 Minnie Mouse Ears 사고 많이 밥을 먹었어요.

지난 주말에 뭐 했어요? 이 주말에 뭐 할거예요? 오늘 토요일이예요. 오늘 밤에 뭐 할거예요? 같이 영화를 볼까요? 뭘(어떤) 영화 보고싶어요? Star Trek 볼래요, Ironman 3 볼래요?

Hello! How are you? Are you doing well? I’m…doing well. When I woke up this morning I had stomach pain. So I took medicine. But this week I have been really busy. Until today I didn’t have any free time.

Last weekend I went to Disneyworld. It was really fun. And at Magic Kingdom I bought Minnie Mouse ears and ate alot of food.

What did you do last weekend? What are you doing this weekend? Today is Saturday. Tonight what are you going to do? Shall we watch a movie together? What movie do you want to see? Do you want to watch Star Trek or Ironman 3?

 

 Your writing is almost perpect, though you are poreigner, you are better then me for writing. You should change both of (yellow line) because 일지 which means that a daily record at work. 뭘 is sort of (which).

 Good Luck^^

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