My role model

When comes to role model,people always think about some pop stars or heros,but my role model is my grandpa.Grandpa is a simple maths teacher.when i was a child, i always thought to be weak because i'm thin and weak in sports and maths. Not only my teachers and classmates,but also my mother always scold that how stupid i was.But grandpa didn't think so.Instead of scolded, he always encouraged me that "don't give up, just try again".Becides, he also helped me with maths.Because of his patient and good teaching,i found maths was so interesting and became good at it day by day.I never forgot the day i had got the first full mark.when i showed it to grandpa, he smiled and shared the happiness with me.During all these years,grandpa has been like a big tree to me.Under the tree,i have felt comfortable,securie and been well protected by him.Because of his encouragement, i overcome lots of difficulties and find back my confidence.What's more, i became to know that very often a disappointment some times can becomes a turning point for a wonderful experience to along.Now i want to express to grandpa that how greatful i am,and his words "don't give up, just try again" are also deeply in my heart.

Pasquale gave you good advice, especially on punctuation.  One blank space after a comma, two blank spaces after a period.

Here is how I would write the passage in <font lang="ZH-CN" face="MS Song">白话.

When comes to role models, people always think <s>about</s> of <s>some</s> pop stars or heroes, but my role model is my grandpa.  Grandpa is a simple math<s>s </s>teacher.  <s>W </s>When i was a child, <strike>i</strike> I always thought <s>to be</s> I was weak because <strike>i'm</strike> I'm thin and weak in sports and math<s>s</s>. Not only my teachers and classmates, but also my mother always <s>scold that </s>told me how stupid <s>i </s>I was.  But grandpa didn't think so.  Instead of <s>scolded</s> criticizing , he always encouraged me,  <s>that </s>"don't give up, just try again".  <s>Becides</s> Moreover, he also helped me with math<s>s</s>.  Because of his patient and good teaching, <s>i</s> I found math<s>s </s>was <s>so </s>interesting and gradually became good at it <strike>day by day</strike>.  I’ll never forgot the day <s>i </s>I had got the first <s>full mark</s>  perfect grade .  <s>w </s> When i showed it to grandpa, he smiled and shared <s>the</s> his happiness with me.  <s>During</s> For all these years, grandpa has been like a big tree to me.  Under the tree, <s>i </s>I have felt comfortable, <s>securie</s> secure and <s>been</s> well protected <s>by him</s>.  Because of his encouragement, <s>i </s>I have overcome lots of difficulties and <s>find back</s> have regained my confidence.  What's more, <s>i became to know</s> I have come to realize that very often a disappointment <s>some times</s> can become<s>s </s>a turning point for a wonderful experience <s>to along</s> (Maybe: a wonderful experience to follow). Now <s>i</s> I want to express my gratitude to grandpa (or: tell him how grateful I am) <s>that how greatful i am</s>, and his words "don't give up, just try again" are also deep<s>ly</s> in my heart.

I hope you understand why I made the corrections. If not, just ask.  It was a well-written passage!</font>

My role model

When it comes to role model, people always think about some pop stars or heros, but my role model is my grandpa. Grandpa is a simple maths teacher. When I was a child, I always thought to be weak because I'm thin and weak in sports and maths. Not only my teachers and classmates, but also my mother always reminded me <strike>scold that</strike> how stupid I was. But grandpa didn't think so. Instead of scolding me, he always encouraged me <strike>that </strike>"don't give up, just try again". Becides, he also helped me with maths. Because of his patience and good teaching, I found maths was so interesting and became good at it day by day. I never forgot the day I had got the first full mark. When I showed it to grandpa, he smiled and shared the happiness with me. During all these years, grandpa has been like a big tree to me. Under the tree, I have felt comfortable, secure and <strike>been </strike>well protected by him. Because of his encouragement, I overcome lots of difficulties and find back my confidence. What's more, I realized <strike>became to know</strike> that very often a disappointment <strike>some times</strike> can become<strike>s</strike> a turning point for a wonderful experience <strike>to along</strike>. Now I want to express to grandpa <strike>that </strike>how greatful I am, and his words "don't give up, just try again" are also deeply in my heart.


--)你的英语真的不错，你英语比我汉语说得好多
--) nevertheless I believe I have to give you back something, so just a couple of corrections
--) first of all: punctuation marks, that is comma, full stop, ",.;:!?"  After a puntuaction mark SPACE, before NO SPACE. For example "word, word" and never "word ,word". It is very different from chinese, but it looks odd in English or Spanish or Italian it is quite important. I personally am distracted by these stilistic errors. One can understand the text the same, but it doesn't look perfect.
--) after a full stop or !? always use a captial letter! Is it OK? Well, I guess it is.
--) in English 我 is written I not i