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Beatriz F.
"And life is, I am sure, made of poetry". It's three in the morning and you are working on a college coursework. It's been two months since your classes began, but you still feel as lost as in the first day. You were supposed to get up at four and the due date is at eight. But who cares about it when for the first time in your life, you are not thinking of the professor's expectations on you, or how many pages are yet to be written, or if you are writing in a fancy way, or if you will get the whole grade. Who cares if in one hour you will have been awake for almost forty-eight hours straight. Who would ever mind if for the very first time you're not thinking about on how tired you might be to attend the classes you will have. Who on earth would care for all those things if for the first time you are writing about literature, you are comparing different authors' points of view on poetry, using your own words and personal reading repertoire. And within the time that last hour lasts, you just forget the reasons why you felt so lost and fearful and insecure about not being capable enough to handle external and internal pressure, but hey this already is an old issue for you. And you just write. And you just feel the words flowing out of you. Just like you know you can do. As strong as the feeling of missing so severely the moments when you were used to write like that. Just like you were alive, and not only a student who will be evaluated. You only have 5 minutes and you just reread everything before you print it. It's been almost forty-eight hours since you are awake now. And the feeling of having chosen the right course on college it's the only thought you allow in your mind.

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Yellow = correction, blue = stylistic suggestion. This is good stuff. You are being very ambitious writing in the second person like this and discussing some complicated emotional states, but you have pulled it off with very few errors, so well done!

"And life is, I am sure, made of poetry".

It's three in the morning and you are working on some college coursework. It's been two months since your classes began, but you still feel as lost as on the first day. You were supposed to get up at four and the due date is at eight (since you are talking about a time of day rather than a date, it's probably better to say "...and it is due at eight"). But who cares about it when (or just "but who cares when...") for the first time in your life, you are not thinking of the professor's expectations on you, or how many pages are yet to be written, or if you are writing in a fancy way, or if you will get the whole grade [I don't recognise the phrase "the whole grade" but it sounds like something from US English so I won't correct it]. Who cares if in one hour you will have been awake for almost forty-eight hours straight?  [all these "who cares if..." questions need a question mark, even though they're rhetorical questions]

Who would even care if for the very first time you're not thinking about on how tired you might be to attend the classes you will have [or "...when you attend classes"]? Who on earth would care for all those things when for the first time you are writing about literature, you are comparing different authors' points of view on poetry, using your own words and personal reading repertoire. And within the time that last hour lasts, you just forget the reasons why you felt so lost and fearful and insecure about not being capable enough to handle external and internal pressure, but hey this already is an old issue for you. And you just write. And you just feel the words flowing out of you. Just like you know you can do. As strong as the feeling of missing so severely the moments when you were used to write like that [this sentence doesn't really work as a sentence, but I'm not sure what to suggest as an alternative. Maybe: "You feel a powerful sense of remembering moments when you were able to write like that"]. Just like you were alive, and not only a student to be evaluated.

You only have 5 minutes and you just reread everything before you print it. You have been awake for almost forty-eight hours now, and the feeling of having chosen the right course in college is the only thought you allow in your mind.

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